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Now, I want to introduce the one who impressed me a lot.Five years ago, I was a primary school student. My family had to move to another city because of my father’s work. I was sent to a new and strange school. I was not an outgoing girl, so it was not easy for me to make new friends. When I felt lonely and sad, a little girl in a red dress came to me. She asked me if I needed any help in a soft and beautiful voice. I was surprised but happy. We became good friends and our friendship has lasted till now. The time I spent with her was the best hours in my life. I believe she will be my friend throughout my life.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文,描述一位給你留下深刻印象的人物。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如because of,be sent to, it is adj for sb to do sth, make friends, in a red dress, last, till now以及spend with等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9.(徐州市西苑中學(xué)中考模擬)書面表達(dá)一日之計在于晨。同學(xué)們,沐浴在晨光中,行走在上學(xué)路上,當(dāng)我們有充足的時間安排一天的學(xué)習(xí)生活時,你會發(fā)現(xiàn)每天早起一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)會給我們帶來許多好處。請你以“ It’s good to get up early”為題,寫一篇90詞左右短文。要求:1. 包含所給信息,并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2. 語句通順,意思連貫,書寫整潔。3. 詞數(shù)90詞左右。開頭已給,不計入總詞數(shù)。It’s good to get up earlyGetting up early is a good habit. It’s good for us in many ways.______________________________________________________________________________【答案】It’s good to get up earlyGetting up early is a good habit. It’s good for us in many ways. Firstly ,we can have enough time to plan a day better .Secondly,doing exercise is good for our health .Also, breathing the fresh air is good to our bodies and our moods, and it can help remember important things easily. Thirdly, having breakfast can help protect our stomachs ,make us have good health ,and have more energy to do all kinds of things better. In a word, the morning is the key of a day. Everyone should get up early every day.【解析】【詳解】本文是一篇話題作文。要求以“ It’s good to get up early”為題,寫一篇90詞左右短文。文章時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時,人稱主要為第一人稱。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì),考生要做的就是用正確的英語把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。動筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料,不可遺漏要點(diǎn),并可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。在寫作時,注意緊扣主題,連句成篇,要層次清楚,要點(diǎn)分明,中心突出。同時要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫太長的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡單的易拼寫的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查,確保正確無誤?!军c(diǎn)睛】點(diǎn)睛:首先認(rèn)真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn);然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá);然后緊扣要點(diǎn),動筆寫作,在寫作過程中,要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡,必要時可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞,使文章過渡平穩(wěn),自然流暢;最后,要仔細(xì)檢查有無單詞拼寫錯誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號誤用等,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10.(山東中考模擬) 如今,很多城市出現(xiàn)了一種綠色出行方式――共享單車(bikesharing),它因環(huán)保、便捷而備受青睞,但同時也引發(fā)了一些問題。請你根據(jù)提示以"Bikesharing"為題寫一篇英語短文,表達(dá)自己的看法和建議。要點(diǎn)提示:AdvantagesBe convenient, less pollution, reduce the traffic pressure(減緩交通壓力)Take exercise…Problems Throw away, damage(毀損), be stolen…Advice Civilized(文明的), follow the rules, take good care of…注意:1. 短文應(yīng)包括以上要點(diǎn),可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,以使行文連貫;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名、校名及地名;3. 詞數(shù):80100(文章開頭已給出,不計入總詞數(shù))。Bikesharing Today, as a greener means of transportation, bikesharing is being more and more popular in many cities. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Today,as a greener means of transportation, bikesharing is being more and more popular in many cities. It39。s known that it has many advantages. So it39。s enjoyed by lots of people.First of all, it39。s very convenient for people to go somewhere.【高分句型一】Also, it helps to reduce the traffic pressure. There will be less pollution because of bikesharing. Besides, bikesharing helps people take more this way, it39。s helpful to people39。s health.(優(yōu)勢) However, it also brings some problems. For example, some people throw them away after using bikes. Even some people damage them, and some bikes are stolen.(難題) In my opinion, everyone should try to be civilized and follow the rules of using bikes. As long as we take good care of bikes, it will make our life better and better,and our environment will be more beautiful.【高分句型二】(建議)【解析】【詳解】這篇短文內(nèi)容豐富,表達(dá)了所有要點(diǎn),語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,意思連貫,符合邏輯。在短文中使用了大量的復(fù)合句、固定句式、連詞及固定短語,為文章增色不少,.如: It39。s known that it has many advantages.,F(xiàn)irst of all, it39。s very convenient for people to go somewhere.,Also, Besides, In this way, However, it also brings some problems. For example, In my opinion,等。【點(diǎn)睛】本文要求以“Bikesharing”為題,根據(jù)表格的內(nèi)容提示,寫一篇短文,表達(dá)自己對共享單車的看法和建議。寫作時,考生要緊密貼合表格中的三個要點(diǎn):首先,闡述共享單車的優(yōu)點(diǎn);其次,列舉共享單車帶來的問題;最后,根據(jù)問題給出個人建議。11.(北京中考模擬)(題文)假如你是李華,本周六與好友相約去北京植物園。你的美國網(wǎng)友Fred正好也在北京,你邀他同去。請你向他發(fā)出邀請,告訴他去哪兒,做什么以及你的建議。提示詞語:Beijing Botanical Garden, have a piic 提示問題:When and where are you going this Saturday? What will you do there? What do you advise him to do?【答案】I’m writing to invite you to join us this Saturday. This Saturday, I’m going to Beijing Botanical Garden with my friends. We’ll meet at our school gate at seven in the morning. Then we are going there by bike. We’ll enjoy the colorful flowers and plants there. We are going to have a piic in the open air. If you like to join us, prepare some food to take with you. Don’t forget to take a bottle of water. I hope you can e and we’ll e back at five in the afternoon. I’m looking forward to your early reply.【解析】試題分析:書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英,也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維,考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以,考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn),要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式,盡可能使用高級詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。本題根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時,邀請對方并給出建議,需使用表達(dá)邀請和用于提建議的相關(guān)短語和句式,注意長短搭配,并在行文中增加細(xì)節(jié)和過渡,使文章讀起來比較流暢。動筆前,