【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 析】【詳解】這是一篇材料作文，主要介紹中國(guó)的經(jīng)典故事, “程門立雪（Stand in the snow to wait for Master Cheng respectfully）”。目的是宣傳和弘揚(yáng)中華優(yōu)秀傳統(tǒng)文化。時(shí)態(tài)為一般過去時(shí)，靈活運(yùn)用動(dòng)詞的過去式。作文要包含材料上的所有信息，通過介紹這個(gè)故事，發(fā)表看法或者觀點(diǎn)。寫作時(shí)，避免漢語式英語。注意固定搭配及主謂一致的問題，例如:There was/ were...注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，具有條理性。8．（河南中考模擬）書面表達(dá)生命就像是一種回聲，你送出什么它就送回什么，你播種什么就收獲什么，你給予什么就得到什么。因此，人們常說“幫助別人就是幫助自己”。請(qǐng)以Helping Others Is Helping Ourselves 為題寫一篇短文。要求：1. 思路清晰，觀點(diǎn)明確，語法正確，有說服力；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；3. 80詞左右。Helping Others Is Helping Ourselves________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Helping Others Is Helping OurselvesNobody is perfect enough to manage to do everything, so help is necessary and important in our life. On the one hand, we should help others often. Giving help can bring us pleasure. Helping an old man cross the road often makes me feel confident and useful. On the other hand, we need others’ help when we get into trouble. I often get help from my parents, friends, teachers, even some strangers. Thanks to their help, it is easy for me to get out of trouble.All in all, everyone needs help. And only who are willing to help others will also be helped.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，主要講述“幫助別人就是幫助自己”。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如adj+enough，on the one hand，on the other hand，make sb do，get into trouble，thanks to，it is adj for sb to do sth。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．（河南中考模擬）“苔花如米小,也學(xué)牡丹開?！蔽覀兇蠖鄶?shù)人雖然微不足道,但也能有所作為。請(qǐng)以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of 為題用英語寫以寫一篇短文,描述你曾經(jīng)做過得引以自豪一件事情。要求:。 【答案】One thing I felt very proud ofI will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday. I tried many times but failed before she came back. Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned. However, I didn’t give up, and finally I succeeded. Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears. I felt proud of cooking on my own.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of為題，介紹自己曾經(jīng)做過的一件令自己感到自豪的事情。作文是開放式的，題目中只給了主題，具體的寫作內(nèi)容，需要學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力去補(bǔ)充。審題可知，體裁是記敘文，記敘一件自己做過的事情，且是能讓自己感到自豪的，故文章應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)，人稱以第一人稱為主。短文應(yīng)由開頭、主體和結(jié)尾三部分組成，開頭引出話題；第二部分為中心，具體描述事情的過程；最后一部分簡(jiǎn)要描寫一下自己的感受。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語式的英語，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，使用較常見、易于把握的簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，如主謂賓或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。為提升作文檔次，穿插使用并列句或復(fù)合句，如賓語從句、狀語從句等?；蚴褂闷硎咕?、非謂語動(dòng)詞、感嘆句等特殊句式結(jié)構(gòu)。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，以使文意連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求描述了自己做過的一件引以為豪的事情。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)，敘述具體，詳細(xì)，作者描寫了自己做飯給媽媽慶祝生日這件事，符合題目要求。文章分三段，第一段用一句話引出話題；第二段詳細(xì)描寫了事情的過程；最后一段寫了自己的感受。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，安排合理。其次短文里使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過去時(shí)、第一人稱敘述，注意了謂語動(dòng)詞過去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過去式。語言得體，語法規(guī)范，句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了時(shí)間狀語從句、并列句、非謂語動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜句式結(jié)構(gòu)。短文中較好的句型和短語有：I will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.、To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday、Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned、Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears等。10．（廣東中考模擬）書面表達(dá)假如你是李明，你的英國(guó)筆友Jack來信詢問你的家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何。請(qǐng)你按照以下提示給他回一封。內(nèi)容如下：1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重，去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣；2. 人們已經(jīng)意識(shí)到霧霾天氣的危害，正在采取各種措施減少其發(fā)生；3. 你在日常生活中打算為此做些什么。參考詞匯：霧霾haze注意：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；2. 語言通順，句子連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；3. 詞數(shù)80左右，信件的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來組織語言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語句式表