【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 8．（河南中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)生命就像是一種回聲，你送出什么它就送回什么，你播種什么就收獲什么，你給予什么就得到什么。因此，人們常說(shuō)“幫助別人就是幫助自己”。請(qǐng)以Helping Others Is Helping Ourselves 為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。要求：1. 思路清晰，觀(guān)點(diǎn)明確，語(yǔ)法正確，有說(shuō)服力；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；3. 80詞左右。Helping Others Is Helping Ourselves________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Helping Others Is Helping OurselvesNobody is perfect enough to manage to do everything, so help is necessary and important in our life. On the one hand, we should help others often. Giving help can bring us pleasure. Helping an old man cross the road often makes me feel confident and useful. On the other hand, we need others’ help when we get into trouble. I often get help from my parents, friends, teachers, even some strangers. Thanks to their help, it is easy for me to get out of trouble.All in all, everyone needs help. And only who are willing to help others will also be helped.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話(huà)題作文，主要講述“幫助別人就是幫助自己”。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如adj+enough，on the one hand，on the other hand，make sb do，get into trouble，thanks to，it is adj for sb to do sth。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．（北京中考模擬）“書(shū)山有路勤為徑, 學(xué)海無(wú)涯苦作舟”, 成功不會(huì)從天而降, 美好的未來(lái)需要靠不斷努力來(lái)創(chuàng)造?某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以“天道酬勤” 為主題的征文活動(dòng)?假如你是李華, 請(qǐng)用英文寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿, 講述你通過(guò)勤奮, 取得進(jìn)步甚至成功的經(jīng)歷, 并談?wù)勀愕母惺?提示詞語(yǔ): diligence （勤奮）, make progress, effort, proud提示問(wèn)題: ? What did you achieve by working hard?? What did you do to make it?? How did you feel about it?【答案】Diligence is a must for us to reach our goals. I never realized it until I tried every effort to win the English speech petition last year. It was quite a big challenge for me because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in public. To give a better performance, I made full use of my spare time to prepare for it. I recorded my lines and asked my foreign teacher to correct my pronunciation. Then I kept practising day and night. Besides, I seized every chance to speak in front of my family or friends. The more I practised, the more confident I became. In the end, I won the petition and got a prize. It was so great that all my efforts paid off. I felt so proud of myself.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇話(huà)題作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下你通過(guò)勤奮, 取得進(jìn)步甚至成功的經(jīng)歷。所提供的材料中列舉了“書(shū)山有路勤為徑, 學(xué)海無(wú)涯苦作舟”, 成功不會(huì)從天而降, 美好的未來(lái)需要靠不斷努力來(lái)創(chuàng)造。主要從：你努力工作取得了什么成績(jī)？?你是怎么做到的？?你覺(jué)得怎么樣？這幾個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱(chēng)為第一人稱(chēng)。注意作文中必須包含材料和提示詞的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性?！靖叻志湫鸵弧縄t was quite a big challenge for me because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in public. 這對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō)是一個(gè)很大的挑戰(zhàn)，因?yàn)槲覍?duì)自己的英語(yǔ)口語(yǔ)沒(méi)有那么自信，在公共場(chǎng)合說(shuō)話(huà)也很害羞。句子because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in 。【高分句型二】The more I practised, the more confident I became. 我練習(xí)得越多，就越自信。這句話(huà)用到了“the+比較級(jí)，the+比較級(jí)”結(jié)構(gòu)。表示“越……，就越……”的意思。10．（陜西西北工業(yè)大學(xué)附屬中學(xué)中考模擬）當(dāng)代雷鋒郭明義，在《幸福就這么簡(jiǎn)單》一書(shū)中，用自己的點(diǎn)滴平凡小事詮釋出幸福的 真諦。幸福就圍繞在我們身邊，簡(jiǎn)單得觸手可得，平凡得召之即來(lái)。那你的幸福觀(guān)又是什么 呢？請(qǐng)以 My Happiness 為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。內(nèi)容包括以下方面：1. 你認(rèn)為幸福是什么？2. 描述一件令你感到幸福的事（需交代時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、過(guò)程與感受）。3. 以自己的感悟揭示：應(yīng)該如何創(chuàng)造幸福。 寫(xiě)作要求：1. 短文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，意思連貫，語(yǔ)言流暢，語(yǔ)法準(zhǔn)確，符合邏輯；2. 卷面干凈整潔；3. 詞數(shù) 80 左右；4. 開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。My Happiness After reading Guo Mingyi’s “Happiness Is So Simple”, I am deeply moved by his view on happiness. As for me,_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Happiness is important in our life. In fact, happiness is always around you if you put your heart into it.I will never forget one thing. Once, I had a bad mark at a math test. I was shy and afraid to meet my parents. But when I got back home late, my parents knew what happened, they said to me: “It doesn’t matter, my child. Remember we’ll be always beside you when you need help. We believe you can be better next time. Never give up!” I was moved and made up my mind to work harder and harder.I feel happy. Whenever I am in trouble, I can feel my parents’ love. I want to be a good child for my parents.【解析】【詳解】幸福就圍繞在我們身邊，簡(jiǎn)單得觸手可得，平凡得召之即來(lái)，這篇作文要求寫(xiě)一寫(xiě)自己的幸福觀(guān)，描述自己對(duì)于幸福的定義，描述一件到幸福的事，最后談?wù)剳?yīng)該如何創(chuàng)造幸福，要注意敘述流暢，在描述過(guò)去的幸福往事的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài)，可以使用到的短語(yǔ)表達(dá)有：happiness is always around you 幸?？傇谀闵磉?；put your heart into it 把你的心投入其中；had a bad mark at a math test 數(shù)學(xué)考試成績(jī)很差；afraid to meet my parents 害怕見(jiàn)家長(zhǎng)；got back home late 回家晚；be always beside you一直在你身旁；need help需要幫助；Never give up永不放棄；made up my mind to下定決心去做…；in trouble有困難?？傮w來(lái)說(shuō)這篇文章分為三大段，條理清晰，敘述完整，完成了既定的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。11．（山東中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)在學(xué)習(xí)中, 不良的學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)慣導(dǎo)致學(xué)習(xí)效率不高。以 How to improve learning efficie