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____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫(xiě)信,告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn),我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示,來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言,充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重;然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施;最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段,一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一,時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一,根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí),應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,寫(xiě)完整的句子,利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次,可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句;語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫,表達(dá)流暢?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況,并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況,講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn);且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,分成了三段,每一段的中心明確,意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài),動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體,句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主,也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句,長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合,使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。8.(山東中考模擬) 如今,很多城市出現(xiàn)了一種綠色出行方式――共享單車(bikesharing),它因環(huán)保、便捷而備受青睞,但同時(shí)也引發(fā)了一些問(wèn)題。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)提示以"Bikesharing"為題寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文,表達(dá)自己的看法和建議。要點(diǎn)提示:AdvantagesBe convenient, less pollution, reduce the traffic pressure(減緩交通壓力)Take exercise…Problems Throw away, damage(毀損), be stolen…Advice Civilized(文明的), follow the rules, take good care of…注意:1. 短文應(yīng)包括以上要點(diǎn),可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,以使行文連貫;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名及地名;3. 詞數(shù):80100(文章開(kāi)頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))。Bikesharing Today, as a greener means of transportation, bikesharing is being more and more popular in many cities. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Today,as a greener means of transportation, bikesharing is being more and more popular in many cities. It39。s known that it has many advantages. So it39。s enjoyed by lots of people.First of all, it39。s very convenient for people to go somewhere.【高分句型一】Also, it helps to reduce the traffic pressure. There will be less pollution because of bikesharing. Besides, bikesharing helps people take more this way, it39。s helpful to people39。s health.(優(yōu)勢(shì)) However, it also brings some problems. For example, some people throw them away after using bikes. Even some people damage them, and some bikes are stolen.(難題) In my opinion, everyone should try to be civilized and follow the rules of using bikes. As long as we take good care of bikes, it will make our life better and better,and our environment will be more beautiful.【高分句型二】(建議)【解析】【詳解】這篇短文內(nèi)容豐富,表達(dá)了所有要點(diǎn),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,意思連貫,符合邏輯。在短文中使用了大量的復(fù)合句、固定句式、連詞及固定短語(yǔ),為文章增色不少,.如: It39。s known that it has many advantages.,F(xiàn)irst of all, it39。s very convenient for people to go somewhere.,Also, Besides, In this way, However, it also brings some problems. For example, In my opinion,等?!军c(diǎn)睛】本文要求以“Bikesharing”為題,根據(jù)表格的內(nèi)容提示,寫(xiě)一篇短文,表達(dá)自己對(duì)共享單車的看法和建議。寫(xiě)作時(shí),考生要緊密貼合表格中的三個(gè)要點(diǎn):首先,闡述共享單車的優(yōu)點(diǎn);其次,列舉共享單車帶來(lái)的問(wèn)題;最后,根據(jù)問(wèn)題給出個(gè)人建議。9.(安徽中考模擬)假如你是李華,你的美國(guó)朋友Johnson打算暑假來(lái)合肥玩,而合肥的夏天經(jīng)常持續(xù)高溫,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示,用英文給他寫(xiě)一封郵件,告訴他防暑降溫的方法?!?清淡飲食; ● 合理休息; ● 適當(dāng)運(yùn)動(dòng); ● ……注意: ;,可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮;、學(xué)校名和地名;,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Johnson Wele to Hefei. It’s a very beautiful city. But it’s often very hot in summer. Here is some advice on how to beat the summer I hope the advice is useful to you. Wish you a good holiday! Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jack, Wele to Hefei. It’s a very beautiful city. But it’s often very hot in summer. Here is some advice on how to beat the summer heat. First of all, you should drink more water and eat light meals, such as salads, fruit and vegetables. Next, you’d better get some sleep after lunch. Don’t stay up and make sure you get enough sleep. It’s not a good idea to stay out when it’s very hot. What39。s more, take some exercise properly. Why not take a warm shower before going to bed. Finally, if you have to go out, please remember to wear sunglasses and a hat. I hope the advice is useful to you. Wish you a good holiday! Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文是一篇關(guān)于防暑的建議,所以寫(xiě)作時(shí),比較多地用到表示建議的句型,比如You’d better… ,You should…. , It’s a good idea to do…., Why not do….? Why don’t you do….? 提出建議時(shí)要條理清晰,可以使用First,…. Second, ….. At last….等表示次序的詞。在文章最后可以提出自己的期望和祝福。寫(xiě)完后記得對(duì)文章檢查復(fù)合,避免單詞拼寫(xiě)及語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。本篇文章首先第一段對(duì)別人的到來(lái)表示歡迎,接著對(duì)合肥的天氣進(jìn)行總的描述,并引出下文自己的建議。第二段也是文章的主體部分。用first of all, Next, What39。s more, Finally,提出了四點(diǎn)建議,其中用到建議的句型,例如you should,you’d better, Don’t…, It’s not a good idea to….., Why not…., please…...等。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,層次分明,詞語(yǔ)及句型使用正確,很不錯(cuò)的一篇文章。10.(浙江中考模擬)書(shū)面表達(dá)