【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 vities can make a real difference to the I suggest we should reuse books as long as we39。d better not spend much money on expensiveclothes.If everyone does something for the environment,I believe the earth will be a better place【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，針對(duì)“低碳生活”你的做法、感受以及建議。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be good for, help with, instead of, besides, make a difference, as long as possible, had better do, it is my duty to。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．（天津中考模擬）書面表達(dá)校園安全問題越來越受到重視，為了確保學(xué)生的安全，學(xué)校制訂了一些規(guī)章制度。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，以“School safety”為題寫一篇100詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文。提示：1. 遵守校規(guī)，按時(shí)到校、離校；2. 不接受陌生人的物品；3. 結(jié)伴同行，天黑前到家；4. 遇到麻煩及時(shí)告知家長(zhǎng)和老師。School safety_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】School safetyMore and more people pay special attention to the school safety nowadays. Here are some rules to keep us safe.First, as students, we should follow the school rules, such as not being late for school and leaving school early. Second, we shouldn’t go with strangers and we shouldn’t accept things from strangers. Third, it’s better for us to have partners on the way home and to school and we must get home before dark. Fourth, if we are in trouble, don’t forget to tell our parents or teachers as soon as possible.I think these rules are good for us. We must obey them.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇話題作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下校園安全。所提供的材料中列舉了為了確保學(xué)生的安全，學(xué)校制訂了一些規(guī)章制度。主要從1. 遵守校規(guī)，按時(shí)到校、離校；2. 不接受陌生人的物品；3. 結(jié)伴同行，天黑前到家；4. 遇到麻煩及時(shí)告知家長(zhǎng)和老師。這四個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為第一人稱。本文是提建議，因此用shouldn’t或should來寫。注意作文中必須包含材料上的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性?！靖叻志湫鸵弧縎econd, we shouldn’t go with strangers and we shouldn’t accept things from strangers. 第二，我們不應(yīng)該和陌生人一起去，也不應(yīng)該接受陌生人的東西。本句話是由and連接的并列句?！靖叻志湫投縄 think these rules are good for us. 我認(rèn)為這些規(guī)則對(duì)我們有好處。句子these rules are good for 。10．（廣東實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)中考模擬）書面表達(dá)農(nóng)歷五月初五，我們學(xué)校將舉行“弘揚(yáng)中華傳統(tǒng)文化——端午節(jié)The Dragon Boat Festival”一系列主題活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你邀請(qǐng)外國(guó)友人Amy來校參加。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示用英文給她寫一封電子郵件。內(nèi)容包括：時(shí)間：農(nóng)歷五月初五地點(diǎn)：學(xué)校操場(chǎng)目的：深入了解中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化內(nèi)容：文化展覽歷史介紹：兩千多年，紀(jì)念屈原體驗(yàn)民間活動(dòng)：賽龍舟，包粽子活動(dòng)意義：1．2．參考詞匯：農(nóng)歷：Chinese Lunar calendar Dear Amy,I am writing to tell you a piece of good news, there will be an exciting event next ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Best wishes!Yours sincerely,Li Ming【答案】Dear Amy,I learn from your letter that you want to know something about the Chinese traditional festivalthe Dragon Boat Festival. I’m happy to share what I know about it with you.The festival has a history of more than 2000 years. It falls on the fifth day of the fifth month according to the Chinese lunar calendar. On that day, people watch exciting dragonboat races and make delicious zongzi, a kind of special food with sticky rice, meat, etc, wrapped in bamboo leaves. These two are both done in memory of Quyuan, a great poet in history.In a word, we all love the festival because it’s a good reminder to look back on history and a wonderful time to get together with family. I hope that you can e to celebrate it with us in the near future.【解析】【詳解】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如learn from，want to know something，the Chinese traditional festival，the Dragon Boat Festival，share with，more than 2000 years，according to，a kind of，in memory of，In a word，look back on history，get together with family，in the near future等。特別是I learn from your letter that you want to know something about the Chinese traditional festivalthe Dragon Boat Festival./ we all love the festival because it’s a good reminder to look back on history and a wonderful time to get together with family./ I hope that you can e to celebrate it with us in the near ，是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章表達(dá)更有邏輯性，也更富有條理?！军c(diǎn)睛】書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。11．（江蘇中考模擬）書面表達(dá)緊張而又忙碌的初中生活即將結(jié)束，在裝載你收獲的行囊——成長(zhǎng)記錄袋時(shí)還應(yīng)增添一份你自己滿意的答卷。請(qǐng)以“My Unforgettable Middle School Life”為題寫一篇文章，記錄你過去三年中難忘的校園生活，并描述自己對(duì)將來學(xué)習(xí)生活的期望。文章應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：過去三年校園生活所得，真的很感激老師的幫助。，互相學(xué)習(xí)，彼此幫助。，盡自己最大的努力幫助有需要的人。4…….（補(bǔ)充12點(diǎn)所得）過去三年校園生活所失。3. ……（補(bǔ)充12點(diǎn)所失）今后的學(xué)習(xí)打算……（12句話描述自己未來的打算）要求：① 詞數(shù)100左右；② 短文的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；③ 文中需包括所有寫作要點(diǎn)，但不要逐字翻譯，可適當(dāng)加入過渡詞句，使短文通順、連貫；④ 文中不能出現(xiàn)考生真實(shí)姓名