【文章內容簡介】 和句式，盡可能使用高級詞匯和較復雜的句式結構以便得到較高的分數。8．（天津中考模擬）近日中央電視臺報道了一個十四歲小男孩何思汗的事跡，介紹了他賣畫籌款醫(yī)治姑姑的感人故事。請你根據以下內容提示，寫一篇短文。（1）何思汗從小和姑姑生活在一起，他自幼對繪畫有很大興趣。（2）年姑姑患上重病，何思汗的家境日漸貧寒。（3）他作畫籌款給姑姑治病。（4）思汗勇于面對困難、主動承擔家務且刻苦學習。（5）你的想法……參考詞匯：嚴重的serious 疾病disease要求：（1）詞數：80?100個。（2）短文的題目和開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。（3）要點齊全，行文連貫，可適當發(fā)揮。The Moving Story of He SihanRecently, the moving story of He Sihan has been reported on CCTV. The 14yearold boy is a student in Grade 9. He________________【答案】Recently, the moving story of He Sihan has been reported on CCTV. The 14yearold boy is a student in Grade 9. He has lived with his aunt since he was only one year old. When he was a little boy, he showed great interest in painting. At that time, they led a happy life. Unfortunately, his aunt got a serious disease in . Their family became poorer and poorer after that. So he decided to do something for his aunt. By selling the pictures he painted, he raised money for his aunt to treat her disease. You can’t imagine what difficulties he faces, he never gives up. In addition, he offers to do all the housework. What’s more, though he is busy, he studies hard and gets good grades.I feel proud of him. Because he never gives up and tries his best to pay back his aunt, no matter how hard the life is.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，介紹何思汗的感人事跡。根據要表達的內容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內容。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如show great interest in, at that time, unfortunately, 比較級and比較級, raise money, give up, in addition, offer to do, what’s more, get good grades, feel proud of, pay back以及try one’s best等。增強邏輯關系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數符合要求。構思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據提綱和主題確定相關的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內容要求學生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當的素材也是使短文中心突出、明確的關鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當的連詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結構是否合理，有無重復、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數是否符合要求等。9．（浙江中考模擬） 為響應我市全面創(chuàng)建國家文明城市的號召，麗水市中小學開展“文明城市，健康生活”為主題的英語征文活動。請你以“The Civilized City, the Healthy Life”為題，根據表格中的圖片及文字提示，簡要描述并適當發(fā)表自己的觀點，寫一篇英語短文。Subject The Civilized City, the Healthy LifeWays of doing ride bikes, reduce air pollution, throw rubbish into the bins, keep the city clean, plant more trees,…Your opinion……（至少2條）注意：（1）詞數80100左右，短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數；（2）文中不得提及考生所在學校及自己的姓名。The Civilized City, the Healthy LifeAs a citizen of Lishui, it’s our duty to____________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】The Civilized City, the Healthy LifeAs a citizen of Lishui, it’s our duty to help build a civilized city so that we can live a healthy life. We can reduce air pollution by riding bicycles. It’s better for us to put rubbish into the rubbish bin. In this way, we can keep our city clean. And we’d better plant more trees to protect the natural environment.In my opinion, I’ll try my best to make our city cleaner and more beautiful. Firstly, I can save water by taking shorter showers. Secondly, I can save energy by turning off the lights when I leave the room. In a word, everyone can do something to make a difference.【解析】試題分析：這是一篇話題作文。話題是“The Civilized City, the Healthy Life”；并給了一些提示和注意事項：（1）詞數80100左右，短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數；（2）文中不得提及考生所在學校及自己的姓名。動筆前要認真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點，要用上提示詞，并適當發(fā)揮，要添加些內容，使文章看起來更充實，最后寫出你的觀點。注意主謂一致問題。寫作中適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關系。注意單詞拼寫，不要犯單詞拼寫錯誤，字數要符合要求。【亮點說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，本文很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。覆蓋所有內容要點；要點全面，結構連貫；語言規(guī)范，敘事清楚，詞匯及時態(tài)運用正確，能夠把提示的內容敘述清楚，語句通順，意思連貫，沒有單詞拼寫錯誤，字數符合題目要求。10．（江蘇中考模擬）俗話說，國有國法，家有家規(guī)。家規(guī)是中華民族傳統(tǒng)文化的重要組成部分。我們的國家主席習近平多次強調良好家風家規(guī)的重要性。假如你是李華，請你根據以下表格內的要點提示，并結合你的家庭實際情況，給你的英國筆友Sam寫一封信，向他介紹一下你的家規(guī)，并向他展示一個溫情智慧的中國家庭。要點提示：三條家規(guī)尊老愛幼，禮貌待人誠實守信，不斷學習按時作息，杜絕熬夜你對你家家規(guī)的看法......簡單闡述你是如何受益的......寫作要求:，可適當發(fā)揮，使行文流暢、通順；；。文章的開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of our Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of you Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow. First, you should respect the old and love the young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next,