【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 ___________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫(xiě)信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，寫(xiě)完整的句子，利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。8．（安徽中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)假如你是華,你的英國(guó)筆友對(duì)中國(guó)文化很感興趣,想到中國(guó)旅行感受中國(guó)文化。你想請(qǐng)他來(lái)你的家鄉(xiāng)一安徴一游,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示用英文給他寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。1位置:中國(guó)東部,安做省南部: :春暖花開(kāi),秋季涼爽:山和古村落: :茶、黃梅戲提示詞:黃梅戲 Huangmei Opera注意:,使行文連貫。,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)Dear DaveI know that you are interested in Chinese culture and Im glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my home town, to have fun?【答案】Dear Dave，I know you are interested in Chinese culture and I’m glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my hometown, to have some fun.Anhui Province lies in the east of China. The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats. There are many famous places to see. For example, Mt. Huangshan, where you will see wonderful plants and special rocks. Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on. As a fan of Chinese culture, don’t forget to try green tea in Anhui which smells good and tastes better. What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!Wele to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給自己的筆友Dave寫(xiě)信，邀請(qǐng)他來(lái)你的家鄉(xiāng)—安徽一游，題目中列出了文章的提綱，審題可知，短文應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容敘述：首先介紹家鄉(xiāng)的位置；然后介紹來(lái)這里最好的時(shí)候；接下來(lái)是介紹家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化，并給出建議。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)合理安排幾個(gè)內(nèi)容，分清主次，并注意上下文的連貫。另外，英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，因此寫(xiě)作時(shí)不能按照漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，寫(xiě)完整的句子。如可以使用簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，易于掌握，不容易出錯(cuò)。但為提升文章檔次，也應(yīng)穿插一些并列句結(jié)構(gòu)或復(fù)合句，以及使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求邀請(qǐng)Dave來(lái)自己的家鄉(xiāng)旅游，并介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，并對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充和修飾，使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)、豐富。短文先對(duì)Dave發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)，然后具體介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的位置、景點(diǎn)、文化等，并提出了建議。全文敘述清晰，層次清楚，主次分明。第二，短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來(lái)敘述，注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞第三人稱(chēng)單數(shù)形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句、賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等復(fù)合句，還有一些好的句型，如The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!、I’m looking forward to seeing you here!等。9．（天津中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)86. 如今，中學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間長(zhǎng)，壓力大。上周我班學(xué)生對(duì)如何減壓、放松進(jìn)行了討論。大家提出了許多種減壓、放松的方法。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示，以How Can We get relaxed為題，寫(xiě)一篇短文。詞匯：壓力pressure要求：（1）詞數(shù)：80~100個(gè)。（2）開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。（3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮How Can We Get RelaxedThese days, many students study too long every day and suffer from great pressure. Last week, my class had a discussion on how to get relaxed and reduce the pressure. 【答案】These days, many students study too long every day and suffer from great pressure. Last week, my class had a discussion on how to get relaxed and reduce the pressure。The students offered different good suggestions. As well as going to the movie, listening to music, even going sightseeing at the weekends, some students think it a good way to take exercise between lessons. After all, too long study without exercise is harmful to our health. Other students feel it important to municate with our parents. We can get help from them when we are in trouble.In my opinion, we should spend a little time developing our hobbies like reading or doing sports while working hard. In this way, we can get relaxed and reduce the pressure.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話(huà)題作文，主要講述如何減壓放松。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如as well as，a good way to，take exercise，after all，be harmful to，municate with，get help from，be in trouble，in my opinion，spend+時(shí)間+（in）doing以及in this way，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10．（北京中考模擬）根據(jù)中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50詞的文段寫(xiě)作。文中已給出內(nèi)容不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。所給提示詞語(yǔ)僅供選用。請(qǐng)不要寫(xiě)出你的校名和姓名。假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備組織學(xué)生本周五去中國(guó)科技博物館參觀。你打算邀請(qǐng)交換生Peter參加。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封郵件，告訴他集合的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)，在那里可以做什么，以及參觀時(shí)需要準(zhǔn)備什么。提示詞語(yǔ): school gate, 8:00, invention, expe