【正文】 smates. When I have someproblems, I always talk to them and listen to their advice. When some of my classmates are sad,I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.Of course, there is more that I should do. I’m really good at English, but some of myclassmates aren’t. I will help them. Then we’ll make progress together.【解析】這篇作文給出的寫作背景是：你們學(xué)校英文報(bào)刊在以Building a Harmonious Class為題征文，你來為?？陡?，談一談如何創(chuàng)建一個(gè)和諧的班集體、你通常是怎么做的以及你還需要做什么。這是一篇開放性的作文，題目中只給出了話題和大概的一個(gè)提綱，具體的寫作內(nèi)容需要我們自己思考，發(fā)揮想象力來充實(shí)完成。因此首先我們要仔細(xì)思考這個(gè)問題，結(jié)合自己的真實(shí)生活，想一想平時(shí)是怎么做的，應(yīng)該怎么做。這是寫作中的一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。另外一個(gè)難點(diǎn)是使用正確的英語(yǔ)將自己的所想表達(dá)出來，英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，寫作時(shí)，不能逐詞去翻譯，而應(yīng)從文章、句子的整體考慮，首先確定這篇短文使用什么人稱、時(shí)態(tài)來敘述；可能用到哪些詞匯、短語(yǔ)和句型，每個(gè)句子應(yīng)以簡(jiǎn)單句為基礎(chǔ)，如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)，然后再變化成較高級(jí)、復(fù)雜是句型，如復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式等。另外還應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)句之間的連接，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞或副詞，使文意銜接緊密、意思連貫。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)。作者根據(jù)題目要求就如何創(chuàng)建和諧班級(jí)發(fā)表了自己的看法。短文中作者結(jié)合了自己日常生活中的所作所為，使文章的內(nèi)容非常真實(shí)。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章中以第一人稱為主、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)來敘述，符合題目要求。語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。文章中以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句，調(diào)整文章結(jié)構(gòu)，使用復(fù)雜句型、短文和較高級(jí)的句型，提升了文章的檔次。這些較好的句型和短語(yǔ)有We should build a harmonious class, because it’s important for us to grow up happily.、When I have some problems, I always talk to them and listen to their advice. 、When some of my classmates are sad, I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.、I’m really good at English, but some of my classmates aren’t. I will help 。10．First of all, twochild policy is the gift for some only some families. maybe the parents解析：First of all, twochild policy is the gift for some only some families. maybe the parents are only child and they can also have only child. Put aside the loneliness of their child, when their child grows up and they grow older, their child may marry with an only child girl accidentally, the burden on their child and his wife is unimaginable heavy. Their child and his wife have to take care of two old couples.In my family ,my parents have a only child. I also have some happy can enjoy some delicious food by myself. But I have no playmate in my family. Sometimes. I may feel lonely.If parents have two children, they can share the burden of taking care of their parents. It would be much better. Also, twochild policy can guarantee the number of Chinese population.【解析】亮點(diǎn)說明：這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)，例如first of all，grow up，grow older，marry with，burden on，have to do， take care of，by oneself，have no playmate，the number of等。而For some families. maybe the parents are only child and they can also have only child. / when their child grows up and they grow older, their child may marry with an only child girl accidentally,/ It would be much ，豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣，是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)。點(diǎn)睛：書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。11．As students born after 1990, we have so many advantages. We are usually kind and helpful. When some解析：As students born after 1990, we have so many advantages. We are usually kind and helpful. When someone is in trouble, we always give him or her a hand. We are also active. We like to do sports and go traveling. Most of us can work hard in class and play happily after school. Besides, we are imaginative and creative. We always try something new and do everything differently. On the other hand, we also have some disadvantages. Sometimes we can’t express our opinions in proper ways。 sometimes we are a little over confident. And many students have no brothers or sisters, so they may do everything for themselves. These problems may make us seem impolite, even we can’t municate with others well. So it’s the most important for us to learn how to get on well with others.【解析】本文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含題目中所提供的所有信息。靈活運(yùn)用各種句式，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各個(gè)要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確，簡(jiǎn)潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。點(diǎn)睛：這篇文章使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如in trouble；do sports；On the other hand ；municate with等；When；Besides ；And ；So等的運(yùn)用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理；同時(shí)語(yǔ)言流暢，內(nèi)容完整，是一篇不錯(cuò)的范文。12．Do you want to have a brother or a sister?Do you want to have a brother or a sister?Last week,we h解析：Do you want to have a brother or a sister?Do you want to have a brother or a sister?Last week,we had a discussion about twochild students think they don’t want to have a brother or a sister. Because they don’t want to share parents’ love with , parents can be tired because of two children. However,others think they want to have a brother or a sister. Because they are eager for a person to play can share their happiness and sorrow.17% of students think they can’t mind having a brother or a should be decided by their parents.I think it is good to have a brother or sister to grow up with, I can share everything with him or her.【解析】試題分析：這是一篇以“Do you want to have a brother or a sister?”為話題的調(diào)查報(bào)告，介紹同學(xué)們對(duì)“二孩政策（ twochild policy ）”不同的觀點(diǎn)，并闡述理由。動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)主題組織材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、關(guān)鍵單詞等問題。結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)表達(dá)。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，做到語(yǔ)句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。還要注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)和想法。寫作亮點(diǎn)：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。本文恰當(dāng)使用了had a discussion about，share parents’ love with，because of，play with, however，also, be good to等詞（組）。采用了豐富的句型，比如：原因狀語(yǔ)從句、I think賓語(yǔ)從句、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等多種句式交替運(yùn)用，使文章增色不少，這是一篇不錯(cuò)的范文。13．It’s spring now. Many people like to go out for some activities. I think it’s a good way to get clo解析：It’s spring now. Many people like to go out for some activities. I think it’s a good way to get close to nature.When we are outdoors and in the natural world, we can not only breathe fresh air and enjoy the beautiful scene, but also relax ourselves for the ing study or work.There are many different ways we can get out into the natural world, such as hiking, cycling, camping and climbing. Cycling is my favourite. I join a cycling club, and often go out with other members. While cycling, we can forget our worries and have fun together. Also, we can learn to be a part of a team and help each other.Whatever you do, remember to stay safe. When you’re outside, it’s better to be with your parents or friends.【解析】試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)以“outdoor activities”為話題，結(jié)合所給的寫作材料，寫一篇報(bào)刊征文稿。根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示可知本文會(huì)使用到一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意連詞、固定短語(yǔ)的交替使用，使文意連接緊密，還要注意使用豐富的語(yǔ)句，注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，最后最好要表達(dá)出人物的感想和看法。寫作亮點(diǎn)