【正文】 vice. When some of my classmates are sad,I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.Of course, there is more that I should do. I’m really good at English, but some of myclassmates aren’t. I will help them. Then we’ll make progress together.【解析】這篇作文給出的寫(xiě)作背景是：你們學(xué)校英文報(bào)刊在以Building a Harmonious Class為題征文，你來(lái)為?？陡?，談一談如何創(chuàng)建一個(gè)和諧的班集體、你通常是怎么做的以及你還需要做什么。這是一篇開(kāi)放性的作文，題目中只給出了話(huà)題和大概的一個(gè)提綱，具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容需要我們自己思考，發(fā)揮想象力來(lái)充實(shí)完成。因此首先我們要仔細(xì)思考這個(gè)問(wèn)題，結(jié)合自己的真實(shí)生活，想一想平時(shí)是怎么做的，應(yīng)該怎么做。這是寫(xiě)作中的一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。另外一個(gè)難點(diǎn)是使用正確的英語(yǔ)將自己的所想表達(dá)出來(lái)，英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，寫(xiě)作時(shí)，不能逐詞去翻譯，而應(yīng)從文章、句子的整體考慮，首先確定這篇短文使用什么人稱(chēng)、時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)敘述；可能用到哪些詞匯、短語(yǔ)和句型，每個(gè)句子應(yīng)以簡(jiǎn)單句為基礎(chǔ)，如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)，然后再變化成較高級(jí)、復(fù)雜是句型，如復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式等。另外還應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)句之間的連接，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞或副詞，使文意銜接緊密、意思連貫。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)。作者根據(jù)題目要求就如何創(chuàng)建和諧班級(jí)發(fā)表了自己的看法。短文中作者結(jié)合了自己日常生活中的所作所為，使文章的內(nèi)容非常真實(shí)。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，文章中以第一人稱(chēng)為主、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)敘述，符合題目要求。語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。文章中以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句，調(diào)整文章結(jié)構(gòu)，使用復(fù)雜句型、短文和較高級(jí)的句型，提升了文章的檔次。這些較好的句型和短語(yǔ)有We should build a harmonious class, because it’s important for us to grow up happily.、When I have some problems, I always talk to them and listen to their advice. 、When some of my classmates are sad, I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.、I’m really good at English, but some of my classmates aren’t. I will help 。10．Our city has been on a “civilized city” campaign for over half a year. And it has changed a lot. I解析：Our city has been on a “civilized city” campaign for over half a year. And it has changed a lot. In the past, lots of rubbish could be seen around us. Thanks to the campaign, the streets look much cleaner now. What’s more, there used to be many people breaking the traffic rules. But now we can find more policemen in the streets who warn people to obey traffic rules and the traffic is no longer in a mess. As students we are supposed to follow the traffic rules strictly. Besides we can serve as volunteers to help clean the city. With everybody behaving well, our city will surely bee a civilized city. 【解析】這是一篇關(guān)于創(chuàng)建文明城市活動(dòng)，要求談?wù)勛约旱目捶ā?dòng)筆前先要認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，圍繞要點(diǎn)組織材料，然后用正確的英語(yǔ)句子把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)，在此基礎(chǔ)上亦可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點(diǎn)。注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)及大小寫(xiě)等問(wèn)題，不要犯語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語(yǔ)意連貫。11．As teenagers, I believe that everyone needs life without a friend is a life without the s解析：As teenagers, I believe that everyone needs life without a friend is a life without the sun. Friendship is one of the most important things in everyone39。s life. Friends are your part of life. Friends make you believe that there really is good in the world. My best friend is Mary. When I am down, she lifts me up. When I lose my way, she guides me and cheer me on. So cherish your friend, Do not save your loving speeches for your friends. With the help of friends, your life is colourful.【解析】這是一篇給材料作文，“ Friendship”為主題寫(xiě)一篇短文，談?wù)勎易钫湟暤囊欢斡颜x。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱(chēng)為第一，三人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：I believe that……，F(xiàn)riendship is ……，F(xiàn)riends are……，When I lose……等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系。點(diǎn)睛：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了友誼的重要性，接下來(lái)介紹我的一段友誼，最后指出如何對(duì)待你的朋友。此處lift sb up, lose one’s way, cheer sb on, with the help of等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。12．Now Internet shopping is more and more popular in the world. It’s a new way of shopping. It has lot解析：Now Internet shopping is more and more popular in the world. It’s a new way of shopping. It has lots of advantages. It is convenient and you can shop whenever you like because the online shops are open 24 hours a day. There are so many goods online that it is easy to find the things that you can’t buy in the shop. Besides, the price is much lower.However, “ Every coin has two sides.” So does Internet shopping. You can’t see the material objects or check their quality. Usually the pictures are more beautiful than the goods. So when we get the goods and don’t like them, sometimes it’s not easy to give them back. What’s more, it’s not safe to pay through the internet.In my opinion, Internet shopping is easy and fast but we should be more careful.【解析】 這是一篇圖表，現(xiàn)在越來(lái)越多的人在網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物，網(wǎng)購(gòu)已成為流行趨勢(shì)，網(wǎng)購(gòu)的利弊也成為人們討論的焦點(diǎn)。要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文，并發(fā)表你的看法。動(dòng)筆前先要認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，圍繞要點(diǎn)組織材料，然后用正確的英語(yǔ)句子把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)，在此基礎(chǔ)上亦可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點(diǎn)。根據(jù)材料可知本文主要是應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)及大小寫(xiě)等問(wèn)題，不要犯語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語(yǔ)意連貫。convenient 方便的；in one’s opinion按某人的觀點(diǎn)13．As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festi解析：As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in . From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對(duì)學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié)，并談?wù)勛约簩?duì)這件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個(gè)表格，里面包括了支持搶紅包這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)以及反對(duì)這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)和理由，只給了一些短語(yǔ)，我們需要組織語(yǔ)言，將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分：支持的人們的理由；反對(duì)者們的理由；自己的看法，可以分成兩段或者三段來(lái)敘述，這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，有層次。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)的不同，不要逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次，還應(yīng)注意使用高級(jí)句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段，第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的，因此了文章的話(huà)題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對(duì)玩這個(gè)游戲的人們各自的理由；第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式準(zhǔn)確，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主，特別注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型，如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s n