【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如the window of our mind, had better do, remember to do, keep away from, what’s more, follow one’s advice, it’s time to do以及it is adj to do。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．（安徽中考模擬）書面表達(dá)某英文報(bào)社組織了題為“我喜歡的英語諺語”征文活動(dòng)，你有意參加。請(qǐng)從下面兩句諺語中任選一句作為標(biāo)題寫一篇英語作文，內(nèi)容須包括：1. 該諺語的含義；2. 體現(xiàn)該諺語含義的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷。a） A friend in need is a friend indeed.b） Where there’s a will, there’s a way.參考詞匯：諺語 proverb____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A Friend in Need is a Friend IndeedA life without friends is a life without sunshine! Friends try their best to help you without thinking of what they can get from it.Once I doubted the usefulness of study, losing my interests and direction, even confidence. Finally, I decided to stop studying. After knowing the news, my friend encouraged me patiently. She insisted on persuading me until I promised to give up this thought.Later, I made up my mind to study hard so as to enter my dream university.Many people will be in and out of your life, but only true friends will leave footprints in your hear. True friends always e to you when you need help.【解析】【分析】這是命題作文。二選一，第一個(gè)是“患難見真情”，第二個(gè)是“有志者事競(jìng)成”?！驹斀狻繕?biāo)題都是以諺語的形式出現(xiàn)，所以考生第一步做的是理解這兩個(gè)言語的意思，選擇自己較有把握的。在選擇標(biāo)題之后，根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容提示，進(jìn)行寫作。寫作時(shí)，先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，這樣才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體10．（天津中考模擬） 最近一份學(xué)生體質(zhì)健康調(diào)查結(jié)果顯示，學(xué)生近視率仍維持在高位水平，且越來越低齡化。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表所提示的內(nèi)容，用英語寫一篇短文，并發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)?，F(xiàn) 狀大約70%學(xué)生眼睛近視主要原因1. 睡眠不足2. 長時(shí)間看書、做作業(yè)、用電腦等預(yù)防方法1. 做眼睛保健操，多進(jìn)行體育活動(dòng)2. 養(yǎng)成正確的用眼習(xí)慣你的觀點(diǎn)… ….（至少一條）參考詞匯：近視的 shortsighted要求：（1）詞數(shù)：80～100個(gè)。（2）開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。（3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。The survey shows that many students have bee shortsighted at a very young age. At present,_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】The survey shows that many students have bee shortsighted at a very young age. At present, about 70% of the students are shortsighted. Here are some main causes.Some students may not have enough sleep. Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Some students even like to watch TV or use puters for a long time.In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises every day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We should have the good habit of using our eyes.I think all of us should understand the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇圖表作文。根據(jù)題干要求可知，本篇文章主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)寫作，人稱用第三人稱復(fù)數(shù)和第一人稱。內(nèi)容包括：學(xué)生近視原因：（not enough）、做作業(yè)、用電腦等（for a long time）防止近視的方法：，多進(jìn)行體育活動(dòng)（eye exercises）（have the good habit of）個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)：如：我認(rèn)為，我們應(yīng)該了解保護(hù)眼睛的重要性，盡最大努力保護(hù)我們的眼睛。（I think ???；try one39。s best to do sth.）。常用的重點(diǎn)句型和短語有：sb. spend some time doing sth.，in order to do sth.，try to do sth.，the importance of…等。11．（內(nèi)蒙古根河市阿龍山中學(xué)中考模擬）書面表達(dá)為了配合“足球進(jìn)校園”活動(dòng)，你們班開張了一次主題班會(huì)。請(qǐng)你以足球迷的身份，根據(jù)下列表格中的要點(diǎn)提示，用英語向同學(xué)們介紹足球這項(xiàng)運(yùn)動(dòng)并談?wù)勛约旱膲?mèng)想。常識(shí)歷史悠久，深受喜愛世界杯4年舉行一次好處男生女生皆可參加利于培養(yǎng)團(tuán)隊(duì)精神考生自擬（至少一點(diǎn)）偶像梅西，有足球天賦夢(mèng)想考生自擬（至少一點(diǎn)）注意：1。詞數(shù)90左右。短文的開頭已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；2。短文須包括所有 要點(diǎn)，不要逐詞翻譯，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使短文連貫、通順；3。短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名，校名等相關(guān)信息。參考詞匯：梅西 MessiDear classmates,I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 footballthemed schools by 2020. ____________________________________________________________________________________Thank you for your attention.【答案】Dear classmates,I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 footballthemed schools by 2020.Football has a very long history. It is liked by people all over the world. The World Cup takes place every four years. Playing football has lots of advantages. First, both boys and girls can take part in it. Second, it helps develop team spirit. What’s more, playing football is good for our health.I’m a football fan. Messi is my hero. He has a gift for playing football. My dream is to bee a famous football player like Messi. I hope China will hold the World Cup some day.Thank you for your attention.【解析】這是一篇給材料作文，用英語向同學(xué)們介紹足球這項(xiàng)運(yùn)動(dòng)并談?wù)勛约旱膲?mèng)想。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為單數(shù)第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用，比如：I’m very excited to hear that……；It is liked by……；it helps……，I’m……，My dream is……，I hope…....等句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系。點(diǎn)睛：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語言簡(jiǎn)練。開頭介紹了關(guān)于足球的常識(shí)，接下來介紹踢足球的好處以及我的偶像，最后介紹我的夢(mèng)想。此處have a very long history, all over the world, take place, take part in, what’s more, be good for, have a gift for等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。12．（湖南中考模擬）人們對(duì)于學(xué)生網(wǎng)上交友持不同意見。請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇關(guān)于學(xué)生網(wǎng)上交友的短文，介紹人們不同的觀點(diǎn)，并表達(dá)自己的看法。贊成的理由反對(duì)的理由你的看法1. 廣交朋友2. 可自由表達(dá)思想3. 有利于外語學(xué)習(xí)1. 浪費(fèi)時(shí)間2. 影響學(xué)習(xí)3. 可能上當(dāng)受騙（be cheated）1. ...2. ...注意：1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括表中各方觀點(diǎn)并進(jìn)行合理拓展。2. 詞數(shù)80詞左右，短文的開頭已給出（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。Nowadays many teenagers show great interest in making friends online. Some people think___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________