【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 子通順，行文連貫。5．臨近畢業(yè)，學(xué)校在學(xué)習(xí)小組內(nèi)開展了初中階段自評(píng)和組評(píng)活動(dòng)，假設(shè)你是 Moonlight 小組 的組長(zhǎng)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面表格中的信息和提示，為你的組員 Tommy 進(jìn)行綜合素質(zhì)的評(píng)價(jià)，寫一 份素質(zhì)報(bào)告．NameTommyCharacteristics聰明、大方（各舉一例）Hobbies喜歡看書，認(rèn)為看書有很多好處（請(qǐng)列舉2個(gè)好處）Honour他在家?guī)椭黾覄?wù)。在學(xué)校和同學(xué)相處融洽。上學(xué)途中遵守交通規(guī)則（舉一例）。今年，學(xué)校授予了他優(yōu)秀學(xué)生獎(jiǎng)（Award for Best Student）Problems面臨考試，遭受壓力痛苦，他沒有充足的睡眠．Your suggestions（根據(jù)實(shí)際情況提2點(diǎn)建議）…要求：表達(dá)清楚、語法正確、上下文連貫；要點(diǎn)必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；詞數(shù)：100 詞左右；不得使用真實(shí)姓名、校名和地名等Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight.【答案】Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight. He is clever and he is good at all his lessons. He is so generous that he shares everything with his likes reading because he thinks he can get much knowledge and learn more about the world by reading. And reading has a good effect on children’s growth. At home, he can help his parents do some housework. At school, he gets on well with his classmates. On the way to school, he obeys the traffic rules. He crosses the road when the light is green. Our school presented him with Award for Best Student this year. However, Tommy is stressed when the exam es. And he doesn’t have enough sleep. I think he should go over what he has learned before exams. It’s better for him to manage his time wisely so that he can have enough time to rest.【解析】這篇作文要求我們按照表格里的內(nèi)容介紹一下Tommy的情況，為Tommy寫一篇綜合素質(zhì)的評(píng)價(jià)報(bào)告。在表格中有非常詳細(xì)的關(guān)于Tommy各方面的內(nèi)容，我們需要用正確的英語把這些內(nèi)容有條理的表達(dá)出來。表格中涉及的內(nèi)容較多，寫作時(shí)要注意表達(dá)的條理性。這篇作文應(yīng)主要使用第三人稱來寫。在最后要給Tommy提一些建議，這一部分應(yīng)該用第一人稱。同時(shí)注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，尤其是表格中的第五項(xiàng)和第六項(xiàng)內(nèi)容?！玖咙c(diǎn)說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。這篇作文內(nèi)容完整，包含了表格中的所有內(nèi)容，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，注意了被動(dòng)形式的使用，如He was rewarded by our school this year.。寫作時(shí)注意了條理性，使文章具有層次感，條理清楚。短文注意到了長(zhǎng)短句的結(jié)合，并恰當(dāng)?shù)氖褂昧艘恍┻B詞，使文章表達(dá)的連貫。如He is always ready to help others.、He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news.、He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this 。 6．書面表達(dá)假如你是華,你的英國筆友對(duì)中國文化很感興趣,想到中國旅行感受中國文化。你想請(qǐng)他來你的家鄉(xiāng)一安徴一游,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示用英文給他寫一封電子郵件。1位置:中國東部,安做省南部: :春暖花開,秋季涼爽:山和古村落: :茶、黃梅戲提示詞:黃梅戲 Huangmei Opera注意:,使行文連貫。,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)Dear DaveI know that you are interested in Chinese culture and Im glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my home town, to have fun?【答案】Dear Dave，I know you are interested in Chinese culture and I’m glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my hometown, to have some fun.Anhui Province lies in the east of China. The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats. There are many famous places to see. For example, Mt. Huangshan, where you will see wonderful plants and special rocks. Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on. As a fan of Chinese culture, don’t forget to try green tea in Anhui which smells good and tastes better. What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!Wele to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給自己的筆友Dave寫信，邀請(qǐng)他來你的家鄉(xiāng)—安徽一游，題目中列出了文章的提綱，審題可知，短文應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容敘述：首先介紹家鄉(xiāng)的位置；然后介紹來這里最好的時(shí)候；接下來是介紹家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化，并給出建議。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)合理安排幾個(gè)內(nèi)容，分清主次，并注意上下文的連貫。另外，英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，因此寫作時(shí)不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，寫完整的句子。如可以使用簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，易于掌握，不容易出錯(cuò)。但為提升文章檔次，也應(yīng)穿插一些并列句結(jié)構(gòu)或復(fù)合句，以及使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語態(tài)等?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求邀請(qǐng)Dave來自己的家鄉(xiāng)旅游，并介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，并對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充和修飾，使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)、豐富。短文先對(duì)Dave發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)，然后具體介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的位置、景點(diǎn)、文化等，并提出了建議。全文敘述清晰，層次清楚，主次分明。第二，短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來敘述，注意了謂語動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句、賓語從句、狀語從句等復(fù)合句，還有一些好的句型，如The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, e and watch Huangmei