【正文】 ass, because it’s important for us to grow up happily.As a member of the class, I respect and trust my teachers and classmates. When I have someproblems, I always talk to them and listen to their advice. When some of my classmates are sad,I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.Of course, there is more that I should do. I’m really good at English, but some of myclassmates aren’t. I will help them. Then we’ll make progress together.【解析】這篇作文給出的寫作背景是：你們學校英文報刊在以Building a Harmonious Class為題征文，你來為?？陡澹勔徽勅绾蝿?chuàng)建一個和諧的班集體、你通常是怎么做的以及你還需要做什么。這是一篇開放性的作文，題目中只給出了話題和大概的一個提綱，具體的寫作內容需要我們自己思考，發(fā)揮想象力來充實完成。因此首先我們要仔細思考這個問題，結合自己的真實生活，想一想平時是怎么做的，應該怎么做。這是寫作中的一個難點。另外一個難點是使用正確的英語將自己的所想表達出來，英語的表達習慣和漢語是不同的，寫作時，不能逐詞去翻譯，而應從文章、句子的整體考慮，首先確定這篇短文使用什么人稱、時態(tài)來敘述；可能用到哪些詞匯、短語和句型，每個句子應以簡單句為基礎，如主謂賓結構或主系表結構，然后再變化成較高級、復雜是句型，如復合句、非謂語動詞形式等。另外還應注意語句之間的連接，使用恰當?shù)倪B詞或副詞，使文意銜接緊密、意思連貫。點睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內容完整、充實。作者根據(jù)題目要求就如何創(chuàng)建和諧班級發(fā)表了自己的看法。短文中作者結合了自己日常生活中的所作所為，使文章的內容非常真實。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章中以第一人稱為主、一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)來敘述，符合題目要求。語法規(guī)范，句式表達符合英語的習慣。文章中以簡單句為主，也使用了并列句和復合句，調整文章結構，使用復雜句型、短文和較高級的句型，提升了文章的檔次。這些較好的句型和短語有We should build a harmonious class, because it’s important for us to grow up happily.、When I have some problems, I always talk to them and listen to their advice. 、When some of my classmates are sad, I’m always ready to give a hand and cheer them up.、I’m really good at English, but some of my classmates aren’t. I will help 。14．（甘肅中考模擬）（年浙江紹興）書面表達?！癏ow can a teenager have a successful life?”的討論，為此你采訪了一些同學（結果見下表）。請據(jù)上經(jīng)用英語寫一篇短文參與討論，并闡述你的觀點。同學主要觀點你的觀點努力學習尊重父母服務社會計劃未來……（至少兩條）注意：（1）短文必須包括表中所有內容，可適當增加細節(jié)；（2）你的觀點至少兩條；（3）詞數(shù)：80—100；（4）短文首句僅供選擇使用，不計入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯：尊重respect短文首句：I have recently done a survey about how a teenager can have a successful life.【答案】I have recently done a survey about how a teenager can have a successful life.Most students believe it’s necessary to study hard. After all, study plays a key role in their life. They also agree they should respect their parents, who look after them every day. Besides, they’re ready to serve the society and in their opinion it’s really meaningful. What’s more, they think each teenager is supposed to make a good plan for future.From my point of view, we need to make some good friends so that we can learn from each other. Also, we must be active and exercise more to keep healthy because it’s important to a successful life.【解析】試題分析：英語教育網(wǎng)站開展主題為“How can a teenager have a successful life?”的討論，采訪了一些同學參與討論，寫出他們的觀點及自己的觀點。因為是敘述同學的現(xiàn)在的觀點，所以句子應該用一般現(xiàn)在時，敘述同學的觀點用第三人稱，敘述自己的觀點用第一人稱。注意不要遺漏要點，所寫的句子應該符合英語語法，不能是漢語式的句子，要使用一些高級詞匯及句式。寫作亮點：短文用了一些短語和句式，如：do a survey about sth關于某事做調查；respect their parents,尊敬他們的父母；look after照顧；make a good plan for sth為某事做一個好的計劃；make some good friends交一些好朋友；keep healthy保持健康。用了賓語從句，如：Most students believe it’s necessary to study hard. What’s more, they think each teenager is supposed to make a good plan for ，如：Also, we must be active and exercise more to keep healthy because it’s important to a successful ，也是提分的經(jīng)典句子?？键c：材料作文。15．（江蘇中考模擬）書面表達流感季通常在每年的10月份到3月份爆發(fā)，據(jù)報道114個美國孩子在今年2月死于流感。流感季節(jié)我們應該如何保持健康呢？易患病人群老人和孩子原因1. 免疫系統(tǒng)弱；2. 流感知識缺乏：流感病毒引起流感；口、鼻、手傳播；公共場所人與人近距離傳播；3. …… （至少1點）預防措施1. 多鍛煉；2. 注意保暖；3. …… （至少1點）要求:1. 所寫內容必須包括提供的所有信息，并適當發(fā)揮；2. 文章不少于90詞，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；3. 語意通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；4. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名、校名等信息。參考詞匯：weaker immune systems （較弱的免疫系統(tǒng)）；influenza virus （流感病毒）The flu （流感）season runs from October to March every year. This year it has been especially bad. It is reported that 114 children in the US died in February. ____________________________________________________________________【答案】The flu （流感）season runs from October to March every year. This year it has been especially bad. It is reported that 114 children in the US died in February. The flu hits children and elderly people the hardest. This is because they have weaker immune system. It is easy for them to get the flu. In fact, most people don’t know much about the flu. The influenza virus causes the flu. The virus can get on your hands. If you touch your nose or mouth, you can get the flu. Because some patients pay no attention to the flu, it starts very suddenly and spreads from person to person closely in public. How do we keep the flu away? We should get lots of rest and exercise. Put on enough clothes to keep warm. Take a shower every day and wash hands often. Remember if anyone around us has the flu, take it seriously and make sure they go to the hospital as soon as possible.【解析】亮點說明：這篇習作的層次清晰，內容飽滿，表達流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語，例如from to，every year，get the flu，in fact，get on，pay no attention to，spread from，person to person，in public，keep away，lots of，put on，take a shower，make sure，go to the hospital，as soon as possible等。而It is reported that 114 children in the US died in February./ If you touch your nose or mouth, you can get the flu./ Because some patients pay no attention to the flu, it starts very suddenly and spreads from person to person closely in ，使本文內容豐富，表達流暢，是本文的最大亮點。點睛：書面表達題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運用所學英語知識準確表達意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式，盡可能使用高級詞匯和較復雜的句式結構以便得到較高的分數(shù)。16．（江蘇中考模擬）某英語報開展“How to deal with the exam stress?”征文比賽，請你根據(jù)表格中的提示內容，簡要描述并適當發(fā)表自己的觀點，寫一篇英語短文。適當?shù)膲毫?. 積極思考，認真學習2. 及時復習，防止遺忘過重的壓力1. 無法入睡，非常疲憊2. 害怕考試，導致失敗應對的措施1. 合理計劃，準備充分2. ……注意：1. 詞數(shù)90左右，短文首句已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。2. 表格最后一欄中省略部分須用12句話展開合理想象，作適當發(fā)揮。How to deal with the exam stressEveryone may have the exam stress. A little bit of stress can be a good thing to us. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________