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class. Although I practiced it for many times at home, I still felt nervous and forgot thewords at the beginning of it. Then I breathed deeply and relaxed myself. You can’t believe how happy I was when I recalled the speech and finished it teacher thought highly of my performance and I got much encouragement from my classmates. From then on, I have bee more and more confident.To build confidence, firstly we need to clearly know about our own advantages and try to develop them. It is the most important that we should put in enough effort to what we do. Then we can finally make it and gain more confidence.【解析】本文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含表格中所提供的所有信息。靈活運用各種句式,采用不同的表達方式將各個要點完整地表述出來,注意主次分明,詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確,簡潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗是否有漏寫,有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等。點睛:這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語,為文章增色不少,如at the beginning of; know about;make a speech等;When ;Although ;Then ;From then on,等的運用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理;同時語言流暢,內(nèi)容完整,是一篇不錯的范文。9.假如你是李華,你們學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備組織學(xué)生本周五去北京世園會參觀。你打算邀請外教 Peter參加。請用英語寫一封電子郵件,告訴他集合的時間和地點,在那里可以做什么,以及參觀時需要準(zhǔn)備什么。提示詞語: school gate, nature, culture, food and drink提示問題: ●When and where are you going to meet?●What are you going to do there?●What do you advise Peter to prepare for the visit?Dear Pete,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition in I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【答案】Dear Peter,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition. We will meet at the school gate at 7:00 . this Friday. Then we will go to Beijing International Horticulture Exposition together. We can do a lot of things there. We can not only enjoy the special and beautiful plants but also learn different cultures in various indoor or outdoor shows. We plan to stay there for a whole day. You39。d better wear a pair of fortable sports shoes and take some food and drinks with you.I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】1. 題干解讀:這是一篇給材料作文,屬于應(yīng)用文寫作。本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點,動筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點,寫作中,應(yīng)注意描述的全面性,盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上;提示的問題就是寫作的基本方向,然后圍繞要點適當(dāng)發(fā)揮即可。2. 例文點評:文章采取郵件格式,時態(tài)以一般將來時態(tài)為主。語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu),語言準(zhǔn)確,語意連貫,表達清楚,具有邏輯性。3. 高分亮點:短語:school gate;invite sb. to do;a lot of;plan to do。句型:not only…but also;You39。d better …;I39。m looking forward to…。10.寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文,標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”,請你寫一篇英文稿件,內(nèi)容需包括以下要點:1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意:1.詞數(shù):100左右(題目不計入總詞數(shù))?!敬鸢浮縇ast summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點問題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個問題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時也要注意在描述過去的故事的時候要正確運用過去時態(tài)。寫作亮點:既然這是一篇記敘文,就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事,需要加上必要的背景,指明時間(Last summer),地點(in rural area),簡要概括事件(teach children English),這是文章首句的點睛之筆,信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少,例如“adjust to…”(調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…),“as time went by”(隨著時間的流逝),“made great progress”(取得巨大進步),“keep on learning”(繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)),“In a word”(總而言之)等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達了作者積極的人生態(tài)度,表示如果還有機會自己還樂于參與,這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,表意更加清晰。