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, you will learn it 。9. “美麗的瓊海我的家,人人都要保護(hù)她”。自雙創(chuàng)以來,我們的生活環(huán)境得到了很大的改觀,人人積極參與雙創(chuàng)活動(dòng),讓人點(diǎn)贊的文明行為隨處可見。作為一名中學(xué)生,請(qǐng)你寫一篇短文號(hào)召大家加入到雙創(chuàng)活動(dòng)中來。要求:,意思連貫,語法正確,書寫規(guī)范;,并做適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣梗?. 行文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名、校名或地名;4. 詞數(shù)80左右,(短文的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù));Since the government created the civilized and healthy city, our living environment has improved a lot. Everyone plays an important role in building our city, so good behaviors can be seen everywhere.As junior high students,___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Let’s take action now. Our actions can make a difference and lead to a more beautiful city.【答案】Since the government created civilized and healthy city, our living environment has improved a lot. Everyone plays an important role in building our city, so good behaviors can be seen everywhere.As junior high students, on the one hand, there are a lot of things we can do. We should be polite to others and try to behave well. It’s kind of you to help people in need. Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier. Also, we can plant more trees and keep off grass. On the other hand, there are many things we shouldn’t do. We shouldn’t make a lot of noise loudly in the public. We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic rules.Let’s take action now. Our actions can make a difference and lead to a more beautiful city.【解析】【詳解】瓊海正在進(jìn)行“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng),即創(chuàng)建文明城市、創(chuàng)建健康城市,城市的生活環(huán)境有了很大的改變。這篇作文要求我們用英語寫一篇短文,號(hào)召中學(xué)生們都參加到“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng)中來。題目中并沒有規(guī)定具體的寫作內(nèi)容,而是用圖表的形式,列出了寫作的提綱。通過審題可知,這篇短文我們應(yīng)從兩個(gè)方面來敘述:即應(yīng)該做什么;不應(yīng)該做什么。根據(jù)這個(gè)內(nèi)容,寫作時(shí),把短文分成兩個(gè)層次,這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、條理。整篇短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),第一人稱we來敘述。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意:首先英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,寫漢語式的英語,而應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)考慮,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型,以常見的主謂賓或者主系表構(gòu)成的簡(jiǎn)單句為主,穿插使用并列句或者復(fù)合句,改變文章節(jié)奏,提升文章檔次。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫、流暢。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,向中學(xué)生們發(fā)出號(hào)召,共同參與到城市“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng)中來。首先短文的內(nèi)容完整,文章根據(jù)題目中列出的圖表,補(bǔ)充了具體的寫作內(nèi)容,從應(yīng)該做的和不應(yīng)該做的兩個(gè)方面,對(duì)中學(xué)生的日常行為提出了要求。文章條理清晰,有層次。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,語法規(guī)范,語言準(zhǔn)確,語句通順,符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文中句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主,也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句以及一些較復(fù)雜的高級(jí)句式,語句之間也使用了較好的連接成分,如We should be polite to others and try to behave well. 、It’s kind of you to help people in need. 、Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier.、We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic 。10.書面表達(dá)以下圖畫呈現(xiàn)了林濤和梅梅在公園里發(fā)生的事情。請(qǐng)用英語寫一篇約100詞的短文。要求:?!敬鸢浮縊ne day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the young tree. First, Meimei kept the tree straight and pushed the earth hard down with her foot. Then Lin Tao knocked a board into the earth. It said, “Please take care of trees.” After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.Trees are good for the environment. We should protect them.【解析】這是一篇看圖作文,要求我們仔細(xì)觀察圖片,弄清楚里面發(fā)生的事情,用英語將這些內(nèi)容完整地?cái)⑹龀鰜?,并?jiǎn)單陳述自己從中學(xué)到的東西。因此寫作前,要仔細(xì)看圖片,了解圖片中所發(fā)生的事情,并提煉出要點(diǎn),列出所要用到的詞匯、短語等,或者列出大概的寫作提綱。通過分析可知,這篇短文講述的是過去發(fā)生的事情,應(yīng)用一般過去時(shí)態(tài),注意謂語動(dòng)詞形式的變化,尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過去式形式。寫作時(shí)要注意按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序,這樣可以使文章條理清楚。還需注意的是英語表達(dá)和漢語的習(xí)慣不同,不能逐詞去翻譯,應(yīng)從句子整體考慮,使用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型,如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。在文章中點(diǎn)綴幾個(gè)并列句、復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句式,調(diào)整文章節(jié)奏,提升文章檔次。語句之間注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,符合圖片所傳達(dá)的信息,表述準(zhǔn)確。作者在短文中敘述了林濤和梅梅兩人在公園里給小樹澆水、并掛牌子告訴人們注意保護(hù)樹木。整篇文章按照事情發(fā)生的先后順序敘述,條理清晰。文章最后的兩句話也點(diǎn)明了文章的主題。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章以一般過去時(shí)態(tài)為主,謂語動(dòng)詞用了過去式,尤其是注意了不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞過去式的形式,如found, kept, got, were, spoke等。語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中還使用了較豐富的句型和短語,如They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to ;再如So they decided to do something for the young tree這句話中使用了句型decided to do ;After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of that, speak highly of等等。