【正文】 ，可適當增加內(nèi)容?！玖咙c說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。點睛：寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．書面表達“Life is like a box of of never know what you are going to get next.”Forrest Gump 中文譯名：《阿甘正傳》“Hope is a good thing. Maybe the best of things and no good thing ever dies.”The Shawshank Kedemption 中文譯名：《肖申克的救贖》“We are all running very hard. We are all dream chasers（追夢人）.”President Xi Jingping以上材料告訴我們：生活是豐富多彩的，有快樂幸福也有傷心失落。但既然選擇了遠方，便只顧風雨兼程。所以在學習和生活中，我們要滿懷希望、努力奔跑、追逐夢想。請以Dream Chaser為題，談談你自己的觀點。要點提示：，并努力讓它成為現(xiàn)實；，使自己不斷強大；，積極參加社會活動；。寫作要求：，可適當發(fā)揮使行文連貫； ，字跡工整，詞數(shù)不少于80；，不計入總詞數(shù)；。Dream ChaserAs we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel ______________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel upset. In order to make our dream e true, firstly we should set a practical goal. But just having a goal is not enough. More importantly, we need to study hard to make ourselves stronger. Besides, as teenagers, it is necessary for us to take part in more social activities. We can learn a lot from each other by joining in those social activities. However, there will be many difficulties in both our daily life and study, so please keep patient and be brave to face these challenges. Finally, all our efforts are meaningful and one day our dream will be achieved.【解析】【詳解】：這是一篇材料作文。主要說明要有自己的目標，努力實現(xiàn)目標應做到勤奮學習，使自己不斷強大；正確面對困難，積極參加社會活動。：例文用第一人稱來敘述主要內(nèi)容；時態(tài)采用一般現(xiàn)在時為主，主要講述如何實現(xiàn)自己的目標（Firstly,…More importantly,…Besides,…Finally,…）。承接文章開頭，句意完整，避免漢語式英語，敘述條理清晰。：高分短語：feel satisfied；feel upset；e true；set a practical goal；both…and…；keep patient。高分句型：It is +adj. + for sb. +to do sth.；there be句型；祈使句；need to do sth.。10．李華的英國筆友Jessica來信說, 她想了解中國的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié)。假如你是李華, 請你給Jessica寫一封信, 介紹該節(jié)日。內(nèi)容須包含以下所有要點：1. 中秋節(jié)的時間；2. 中秋節(jié)的傳統(tǒng)習俗及慶祝方式：全家人一起吃飯, 賞月, 吃月餅等；3, 我最期待的活動。要求：〔開頭和結(jié)尾已給出, 不計入總詞數(shù)）；, 意思連貫, 書寫工整。Dear Jessica, I39。m glad to hear from you. Now let me introduce the MidAutumn Festival to Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jessica,I39。m glad to hear from you. Now let me introduce the MidAutumn Festival to you. The MidAutumn Festival falls on the 15th of the 8th lunar month. It’s a big day for us Chinese people. All the family members get together to celebrate the festival. In the evening, we usually have a big dinner. And then we go outside and enjoy the full moon. The moon that night looks the brightest. With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit together to eat mooncakes, and share our stories.For me, the best part is to enjoy the moon and eat mooncakes. Mooncakes taste very delicious. They look like the moon, big and round.Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本篇寫作是以書信的方式向筆友介紹中國的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié)，要用一般現(xiàn)在時來寫。全文可分兩大部分，第一部分寫中秋節(jié)的時間、傳統(tǒng)習俗及慶祝方式，第二部分寫我最期待的活動。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)，主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如get together，enjoy the full moon， share our stories等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，句子通順，行文連貫。