【正文】 be proud of等詞（組）恰當使用，使上下文意連接緊密；文章的最后I hope one day, my school and teachers will be proud of me! 表達了自己愿望與想法，使文章增色不少，值得學習。9． 書面表達共享單車（shared bikes）在蘇州投入使用以來，給人們帶來了諸多便利，受到人們的追捧，改變了人們的出行方式，但同時也遇到了一些挑戰(zhàn)，是國民素質(zhì)的‘“照妖鏡”，請你根據(jù)表格中信息的提示，給《21世紀英文報》寫一篇關于共享單車看法的稿件。社會現(xiàn)狀自從出現(xiàn)，飽受贊譽。諸多優(yōu)勢，出行方便，減少污染 ，負擔得起存在問題 你的觀點我認為……（考生自擬，至少2點）注意事項：，要求語句通順，意思連貫?！澳愕挠^點”一欄用2―3句話展開合理想象。作適當發(fā)揮。，文章的開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Shared bikes are being more and more popular in our daily life. 【答案】Shared bikes are being more and more popular in our daily life. They have won high praise since they appeared.Shared bikes have brought us many advantages. They can be seen everywhere so that it39。s easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What39。s more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.But there are some problems too. Some people can39。t return shared bikes in time. Sometimes shared bikes take up too much of the road, so they are in our way.I think we should encourage more people to use shared bikes properly. After all, it39。s a way of living a green life.【解析】這篇作文要求我們給《21世紀英文報》投稿，談一談自己對共享單車的看法。題目中利用表格的形式給我們列舉了短文的主要內(nèi)容，包括：共享單車的優(yōu)勢；存在的問題以及你自己對這件事情的看法。前兩個內(nèi)容我們需要根據(jù)表格的提示用正確的英語表達，而自己的觀點則需要學生們自己發(fā)揮想象力，組織語言，并表達出來，要求至少兩點。通過審題可知，這篇短文應主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第三人稱來敘述，短文可以分成兩段或者三段，一個內(nèi)容一段或前兩個內(nèi)容合到一段。寫作時，應注意英語表達習慣和漢語的不同，不能逐詞翻譯，而應從句子的整體考慮，簡單句、并列句和復合句交叉使用，改變文章句式節(jié)奏，使用不同的句式，避免單調(diào)。語句之間注意使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使整篇文章意思連貫、表達流暢。點睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目要求的所有信息。短文分成了四段，第一段引出話題共享單車；第二段講述了共享單車的一些優(yōu)點；第三段介紹了一些問題；最后一段作者提出了自己的看法。分段敘述使文章的結構清晰，主題明確，有層次性。其次短文中使用了恰當?shù)臅r態(tài)和人稱，文章以第三人稱、一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主，語法規(guī)范，用詞準確，句式富于變化。例如They can be seen everywhere so that it39。s easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What39。s more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford ；另外文章中還使用了恰當?shù)倪B接成分，如Also, What’s more, But, sometimes, After all等等。正確文章行文連貫、語句通順、表達流暢。10． 假如你是李華，你的英國筆友 Jack 給你寫郵件表達了想?yún)⒓幽阈Ｊ钇跒橥鈬鴮W生舉辦的漢語夏令營的愿望，希望你告知活動舉辦的具體時間地點，活動安排以及你的建議。提示詞語： Chinese classes, learn, attend, culture, prepare提示問題： ● When and where will the Chinese Summer Camp be held?● What activities will be held at the Chinese Summer Camp?● What is your advice for Jack?Dear Jack,I am very glad to know that you are interested in the Chinese Summer Camp in ourschool this summer holiday . .Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jack,I am very glad to know that you are interested in the Chinese Summer Camp in our school this summer holiday.The Chinese Summer Camp will be held in our school from July 10th to July 30th this summer. The activities of this Chinese Summer Camp are as follows:First, you will attend Chinese classes, learning the meaning of Chinese characters. Second, you will take part in different parties, knowing the history of China and Chinese culture, especially Chinese holidays, which will impress you deeply.What’s more, you will have chances to visit some museums and the Great Wall. What you should prepare is a pair of shoes for the visit. If you have any questions, please tell me. I am looking forward to your early reply. Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】：這是一篇提綱類書面表達，只給了一些要點提示，但都不很明確。學生除了要把所給要點提示都表達出來外，還要進行適當拓展，使文章內(nèi)容充實。：該題要求寫作體裁為書信格式，所以例文用第一人稱I進行寫作，在文章結尾也按照標準書信格式進行了收尾。文章時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時。文章條理分明，三個要點提示都已表達清楚，并進行了適當拓展，所給單詞也都全部用上。：短語：as follows，take part in，What’s more，look forward to。句型：被動句型，現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語，主語從句。