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理;同時語言流暢,內(nèi)容完整,是一篇不錯的范文。9.書面表達為了配合“足球進校園”活動,你們班開展了一次主題班會。請你以足球迷的身份,根據(jù)下列表格中的要點提示,用英語向同學們介紹足球這項運動并談談自己的夢想。常 識歷史悠久,深受喜愛世界杯4年舉行一次好 處男生女生皆可參加利于培養(yǎng)團隊精神考生自擬(至少1點)偶 像梅西,有足球天賦夢 想考生自擬(至少1點)注意:1. 詞數(shù)90左右。短文的開頭已為你寫好,不計入總詞數(shù);,不要逐詞翻譯,可適當發(fā)揮,使短文連貫、通順;、校名等相關(guān)信息。參考詞匯:梅西 MessiDear classmates,I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 footballthemed schools by 2020. Thank you for your attention.【答案】Dear classmates,I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 footballthemed schools by 2020.Football has a very long history.It is liked by people all over the world.The World Cup takes place every four years.Playing football has lots of advantages.First,both boys and girls can take part in it.Second,it helps develop team spirit.What’s more,playing football is good for our health.I’m a football fan.Messi is my hero.He has a gift for playing football.My dream is to bee a famous football player like Messi.I hope China will hold the World Cup some day.Thank you for your attention.【解析】【詳解】試題分析:本題要求按提綱的提示,介紹足球運動并談談自己的夢想。要求仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示,弄清試題提供的所有信息,明確本文主要從三個方面來寫:介紹足球運動及其好處;說說自己的偶像;談談自己的夢想。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語,按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài);語言表達要符合英語習慣。寫作亮點:本文語言精煉,像第二自然段的Football has a very long history. It is liked by people all over the world. The World Cup takes place every four years. it helps develop team spirit. What’s more, playing football is good for our health. 等等句子,簡潔,但是句意表達清楚;同時,本文用了被動語態(tài)、動名詞作主語、不定式作表語等等語法形式,使表達生動;用了first, second等使得短文層次清楚。10.你是一位九年級的學生李明,你用英語寫一封郵件給你的筆友Amy,感謝她對你關(guān)心,并告訴她目前你在全力以赴為中考而學習,并與她交流一下目前的學習和生活情況。要點如下: (1). 雖然你大部分功課你都學得比較好,但是你對自己不滿意。你認為自己學習上還要多花工夫。 (2). 你的父母對你嚴格要求,但是也很關(guān)心你。(舉例說明,適當發(fā)揮2—3句)…… (3). 老師很樂意幫助你們。他們希望你們實現(xiàn)自己的理想。他們說(適當發(fā)揮2—3句)……注意: (1). 要求語句通順,意思連貫。 (2). 第2要點和第3要點要用2—3句話作適當發(fā)揮。 (3). 詞數(shù)90個左右,郵件開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。s important not to be afraid of any kind of difficulty. How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,告訴艾米目前你在全力以赴為中考而學習,并與她交流一下目前的學習和生活情況。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務,語言表達符合英語習慣,準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點詞句,如get good results, spend+時間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等,增強邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。