【正文】 be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個溫情的中國家庭。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。【點睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。14．（江蘇中考模擬）書面表達 Hey Li Ming,I will move to your munity and stay for two months. I want to know something about your munity. What is your munity like? What activities do you usually have? How can I get along with your neighbors?Write soon!Yours,Ben假如你是Li Ming，請用英語給筆友Ben回復(fù)郵件。注意：；，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；，郵件的開頭與結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Dear Ben,I’m very glad to know that you will e to our munity. Yours, Li Ming【答案】Dear Ben,I’ m very glad to know that you will e to our munity. My munity is in the northern part of the city. It’s not a big one, but it’s quite beautiful. You can see a garden with different flowers when entering it. You can breathe fresh air every morning because of many trees in it.Besides, we also have different activities. For example, people in Helping Hand Club always do some shopping for the old who live alone. Every weekend, college students always help us with our homework.All the people in our munity are kind and easy to get on with. You’d better say “Hello” to greet them. If you bump into someone, it will be polite to say “sorry”.That’s all about our munity. I hope you will have a good time here.Yours, Li Ming【解析】試題分析：本文是要求寫一封電子郵件，寫作時注意要寫信的格式。假如你是Li Ming，請用英語給筆友Ben回復(fù)郵件。動筆前要認真閱讀電子郵件，寫作時需回答郵件內(nèi)所提問題，可適當發(fā)揮。仔細閱讀本的電子郵件，找出他的問題（我想了解一下你們社區(qū)的情況。你的社區(qū)是什么樣的？你通常有什么活動？我怎樣和你的鄰居相處？），然后根據(jù)問題做出回答。根據(jù)內(nèi)容可知本文主要時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時。寫作時，列好提綱，注意使用連詞，句型、句式，使文章整體意思連貫，表達流暢。寫完以后，注意再讀一遍，看看有無拼寫，語法錯誤（時態(tài)，主謂一致等）。（一）列提綱：1. 社區(qū)是什么樣的in the northern part of the city/ big but quite beautiful/ a garden with different flowers. 2. 活動do some shopping for the old who live alone/ college students always help us with our . 怎樣和鄰居相處kind and easy to get on with./“Hello” to greet them. /If you bump into someone, it will be polite to say “sorry”.（二）根據(jù)提綱連詞成句，然后連句成篇，注意連詞的使用。（三）寫完以后，在閱讀一遍，檢查單詞拼寫，語法，動詞時態(tài)，語序，大小寫，標點符號，主謂一致等是否有錯誤。點睛：這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，語言表達要符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，用詞準確、句子通順。（1）學習中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當引用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理。（2）注意給出的起始句（這就給出了時態(tài)），學生運用正確的時態(tài)，運用所給或所學的詞語，盡量運用熟悉的句型。（3）列好提綱和要點，及需要的重要短語或句型。（3）切忌堆砌詞語，句子，注意運用適當?shù)倪B詞使句子流暢，連貫。注意表達的順序。 （4）注意書寫的規(guī)范：大小寫，標點符號等的正確運用。 （5）注意檢查：單詞拼寫，語法，動詞時態(tài)，語序，主謂一致等。15．（黑龍江中考模擬）話題作文：根據(jù)漢語提示和要求寫一篇短文。（A和B兩篇，可任選一篇）現(xiàn)在有許多新的購物方式，網(wǎng)上購物就是其中的一種。越來越多的人熟悉和喜歡網(wǎng)購，但是網(wǎng)購有利有弊，請根據(jù)下面提供的信息用英語以“Online shopping”為題寫一篇短文，描述網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點和缺點，并談?wù)勛约旱目捶?。?yōu)點：可以在任何時候購物；只需要一臺電腦和鼠標；方便比較同類產(chǎn)品的價格，可以省錢；無論何時何地都可以收到所購物品。缺點：網(wǎng)上付款有時不安全；看不到實物，也不能試穿衣服。注意：語意連貫，表達準確；詞數(shù)80－100。字跡工整，語法正確，意思連貫，合乎邏輯，可適當發(fā)揮?！敬鸢浮縊nline shoppingThere are many new ways of shopping, and online shopping is one of them.Online shopping has several advantages. First, you can shop at any time. Second, to shop on the Internet you only need a puter and mouse. Third, you can pare the prices of the same product and save money. You can also receive it anywhere in the world at any time!But shopping on the Internet also has some disadvantages. Paying over the Internet isn’t always safe. You can’t see the product or try the clothes on.I think our life is changing because of online shopping. One day no one will go to the shops any more, because you’ll be able to buy almost anything on the Internet.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，要表達網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物的利與弊。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如advantage, at any time, the price of, disadvantage, try on, not...any more等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。16．（江蘇中考模擬）書面表達流感季通常在每年的10月份到3月份爆發(fā)，據(jù)報道114個美國孩子在今年2月死于流感。流感季節(jié)我們應(yīng)該如何保持健康呢？易患病人群老人和孩子原因1. 免疫系統(tǒng)弱；2. 流感知識缺乏：流感病毒引起流感；口、鼻、手傳播；公共場所人與人近距離傳播；3. …… （至少1點）預(yù)防措施1. 多鍛煉；2. 注意保暖；3. …… （至少1點）要求:1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括提供的所有信息，并適當發(fā)揮；2. 文章不少于90詞，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；3. 語意通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；4. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名、校名等信息。參考詞匯：weaker immune systems （較弱的免疫系統(tǒng)）；influenza virus （流感病毒）The flu （流感）season runs from October to March every year. This year it has been especially bad. It is reported that 114 children in the US died in February. ____________________________________________________________________【答案】The flu （流感）season runs from October to March every year. This year it has been especially bad. It is reported that 114 children in the US died in February. The flu hits children and elderly people the hardest. This is because they have weaker immune system. It is easy for them to get the flu. In fact, most people don’t know much about the flu. The influenza virus causes the flu. The virus can get on your hands. If you touch your nose or mouth, you can get the flu. Because some patients pay no attention to the flu, it starts very suddenly and spreads from person to person closely in public. How do we keep the flu away? We should get lots of rest and exercise. Put on enough clothes to keep warm. Take a shower every day and wash hands often. Remember if anyone around us has the flu, take it seriously and make sure they go to the hospital as soon as possible.【解析】亮點說明：這篇習作的層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語，例如from to，every year，get the flu，in fact，get on，pay no attention to，s