【正文】 投稿，談?wù)勎覀兠媾R的主要環(huán)境問題是什么，為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么，以及你的期望。提示詞語： pollution, protect, save, recycle, take action提示問題：● What are the main environmental problems we have?● What can we do in our daily life? ● What’s your wish?Now there are many environmental 【答案】例文Now there are many environmental problems. Such as air pollution, water pollution and so on.I believe that there are many things we can do in our daily life, we can save energy by go to school by bike or on foot. We can use less water by turning off the tap while we brush our teeth, and taking shorter showers. When we see litter on the ground, we must pick it up and put it into different bins. I hope everyone can take action. Although each one of us may only do a little, together we can make a big difference. Let’s work together to make a better place to live.【解析】【詳解】題干解讀：該題目屬于說明文寫作，寫作時(shí)要把我們面臨的主要環(huán)境問題是什么，為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么，以及你的期望全部包括。例文點(diǎn)評：例文采用的是三段式；用第一人稱來敘述為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么；時(shí)態(tài)采用的是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述建議時(shí)，描寫具體，條理清晰。高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：save energy；brush our teeth；put it into different bins；take action；make a big difference。句型：When we see litter on the ground, we must pick it up and put it into different bins；Although each one of us may only do a little, together we can make a big difference?！军c(diǎn)睛】首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)，例如save energy；brush our teeth；put it into different bins；take action；make a big difference。以及狀語從句等；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫作，在寫作過程中，要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡，必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞，使文章過渡平穩(wěn)，自然流暢；最后，要仔細(xì)檢查有無單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10．書面表達(dá)（本題15分）根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作，請將作文寫在答題卡指定的位置上。為了使生活更美好，社會(huì)需要正能量（positive energy）。生活中，我們需要他人的幫助，也要學(xué)會(huì)幫助他人。請你在網(wǎng)上給What would you do?本期節(jié)目留言，內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法；2. 說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例；3. 呼吁大家互幫互助，彼此感恩，讓社會(huì)充滿正能量。作文要求：1．不得照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不必抄寫在試卷上，也不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”（113w）【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，描述對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵(lì)大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。