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________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,Li Hua【答案】例文Thank you for your letter. I am glad to tell you about my dream job. Teaching is my dream job because I would like to share my knowledge with my students and help them solve problems. I am outgoing and helpful. I get on well with children. Besides, the school39。s environment appeals to me and staying with students helps to keep me young and alive. To realize my dream, I have to make full use of spare time to acquire the essential knowledge and enter a good university. What efforts are you making for your dream?Tell me about your ideal job!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【分析】本題通過描寫夢想中的職業(yè),讓學(xué)生對未來有憧憬,給一部分提示詞,讓學(xué)生有話可說?!驹斀狻渴紫然卮鹇殬I(yè)是教師。然后解釋為什么喜歡該工作,因?yàn)榭梢园炎约旱闹R(shí)分享給孩子們,并且喜歡學(xué)校的環(huán)境。為了實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢想,正在為此作出努力。最后向Bill提出問題,結(jié)束全文。【點(diǎn)睛】本文首先開篇功能句Thank you for your ,運(yùn)用多種連接詞,比如because,Besides,To realize my dream, 等使文章連貫性強(qiáng),長短句結(jié)合,讀起來朗朗上口,不失為一篇佳作。5. 書面表達(dá)共享單車(shared bikes)在蘇州投入使用以來,給人們帶來了諸多便利,受到人們的追捧,改變了人們的出行方式,但同時(shí)也遇到了一些挑戰(zhàn),是國民素質(zhì)的‘“照妖鏡”,請你根據(jù)表格中信息的提示,給《21世紀(jì)英文報(bào)》寫一篇關(guān)于共享單車看法的稿件。社會(huì)現(xiàn)狀自從出現(xiàn),飽受贊譽(yù)。諸多優(yōu)勢,出行方便,減少污染 ,負(fù)擔(dān)得起存在問題 你的觀點(diǎn)我認(rèn)為……(考生自擬,至少2點(diǎn))注意事項(xiàng):,要求語句通順,意思連貫?!澳愕挠^點(diǎn)”一欄用2―3句話展開合理想象。作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。,文章的開頭部分已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Shared bikes are being more and more popular in our daily life. 【答案】Shared bikes are being more and more popular in our daily life. They have won high praise since they appeared.Shared bikes have brought us many advantages. They can be seen everywhere so that it39。s easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What39。s more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.But there are some problems too. Some people can39。t return shared bikes in time. Sometimes shared bikes take up too much of the road, so they are in our way.I think we should encourage more people to use shared bikes properly. After all, it39。s a way of living a green life.【解析】這篇作文要求我們給《21世紀(jì)英文報(bào)》投稿,談一談自己對共享單車的看法。題目中利用表格的形式給我們列舉了短文的主要內(nèi)容,包括:共享單車的優(yōu)勢;存在的問題以及你自己對這件事情的看法。前兩個(gè)內(nèi)容我們需要根據(jù)表格的提示用正確的英語表達(dá),而自己的觀點(diǎn)則需要學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力,組織語言,并表達(dá)出來,要求至少兩點(diǎn)。通過審題可知,這篇短文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),第三人稱來敘述,短文可以分成兩段或者三段,一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段或前兩個(gè)內(nèi)容合到一段。寫作時(shí),應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語的不同,不能逐詞翻譯,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,簡單句、并列句和復(fù)合句交叉使用,改變文章句式節(jié)奏,使用不同的句式,避免單調(diào)。語句之間注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使整篇文章意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目要求的所有信息。短文分成了四段,第一段引出話題共享單車;第二段講述了共享單車的一些優(yōu)點(diǎn);第三段介紹了一些問題;最后一段作者提出了自己的看法。分段敘述使文章的結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,主題明確,有層次性。其次短文中使用了恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章以第三人稱、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主,語法規(guī)范,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句式富于變化。例如They can be seen everywhere so that it39。s easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What39。s more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford ;另外文章中還使用了恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,如Also, What’s more, But, sometimes, After all等等。正確文章行文連貫