【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 aking fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned. However, I didn’t give up, and finally I succeeded. Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears. I felt proud of cooking on my own.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of為題，介紹自己曾經(jīng)做過(guò)的一件令自己感到自豪的事情。作文是開(kāi)放式的，題目中只給了主題，具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，需要學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力去補(bǔ)充。審題可知，體裁是記敘文，記敘一件自己做過(guò)的事情，且是能讓自己感到自豪的，故文章應(yīng)使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱(chēng)以第一人稱(chēng)為主。短文應(yīng)由開(kāi)頭、主體和結(jié)尾三部分組成，開(kāi)頭引出話題；第二部分為中心，具體描述事情的過(guò)程；最后一部分簡(jiǎn)要描寫(xiě)一下自己的感受。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能按照漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，寫(xiě)漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，使用較常見(jiàn)、易于把握的簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，如主謂賓或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。為提升作文檔次，穿插使用并列句或復(fù)合句，如賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等?；蚴褂闷硎咕洹⒎侵^語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、感嘆句等特殊句式結(jié)構(gòu)。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，以使文意連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求描述了自己做過(guò)的一件引以為豪的事情。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)，敘述具體，詳細(xì)，作者描寫(xiě)了自己做飯給媽媽?xiě)c祝生日這件事，符合題目要求。文章分三段，第一段用一句話引出話題；第二段詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)了事情的過(guò)程；最后一段寫(xiě)了自己的感受。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，安排合理。其次短文里使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，文章以一般過(guò)去時(shí)、第一人稱(chēng)敘述，注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞過(guò)去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過(guò)去式。語(yǔ)言得體，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句、并列句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜句式結(jié)構(gòu)。短文中較好的句型和短語(yǔ)有：I will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.、To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday、Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned、Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears等。10．（廣東蛇口育才二中中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)初中即將畢業(yè)，同學(xué)們都感到壓力很大。就此問(wèn)題，老師要求你在英語(yǔ)課上做一個(gè)以“Less Pressure Makes Life Better”為題的報(bào)告，談?wù)勀愕淖龇?，與同學(xué)分享經(jīng)驗(yàn)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要求寫(xiě)一份發(fā)言稿，內(nèi)容包括：1. 普遍存在的壓力：同學(xué)關(guān)系；考試2. 我過(guò)去的壓力：父母的期望；學(xué)習(xí)3. 我成功緩解壓力的辦法及效果；……要求：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和校名；2. 詞數(shù)80左右，短文的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Less Pressure Makes Better LifeHello, everyone!Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對(duì)現(xiàn)在同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象，以Less Pressure Makes Life Better為題，談?wù)勛约旱目捶?，和同學(xué)們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。審題可知，文章中應(yīng)主要包括以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容：首先介紹同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象；然后講述自己過(guò)去曾面對(duì)的壓力；最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱，其中具體的內(nèi)容應(yīng)由學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來(lái)補(bǔ)充，并用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)。學(xué)生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會(huì)出發(fā)，選取生活中常見(jiàn)的場(chǎng)景進(jìn)行介紹。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，注意根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，并變化謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，這樣的句式表達(dá)簡(jiǎn)潔、明了，易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句，或使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，談了自己對(duì)同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法，并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，且層次清晰，文章分成了四段，每一段的中心話題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，敘述清晰、簡(jiǎn)潔。也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句的結(jié)構(gòu)，如賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式，如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。11．（陜西師大附中中考模擬）隨著中考的臨近，初三同學(xué)感到壓力很大， 有些人由于學(xué)習(xí)方法不當(dāng)，盲目刷題或連 續(xù)熬夜，導(dǎo)致上課時(shí)精力不足，考試成績(jī)?cè)桨l(fā)不理想。結(jié)合上述情況，請(qǐng)以 How to improve our study 為題寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)演講稿，向同學(xué)們提出建議。寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：，課堂認(rèn)真聽(tīng)講，做好筆記，課后按時(shí)完成作業(yè)。，合理安排時(shí)間。3. …… 寫(xiě)作要求：，意思連貫，語(yǔ)法正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。，校名等； 70 詞，開(kāi)頭給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。How to improve our studyDear friends，I’m very sorry to hear that most of us have great pressure in study and don’t perform well in the Here’s my advice. Thanks for your listening!【答案】How to improve our studyAs middle school students, it is important for us to improve our study. What should we do to improve our study?First of all, we should get ready for new lessons before class. What’s more, we must listen to the teachers and take notes carefully in class. Besides, it is necessary for us to finish our homework on time after class. Last but not least, try to make study plans for ourselves and make good use of our time. Only by doing these simple things can we improve our study.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，要表達(dá)如何提高我們的學(xué)習(xí)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如it is adj for sb to do, on time, make good use of以及first of all, what’s more, besides和last but not least。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。12．（四川成都外國(guó)語(yǔ)學(xué)校中考模擬）寫(xiě)作。Having studied in this school for almost three years, you are about to graduate （畢業(yè)）. There must be something that you will always remember. Please write a passage about your Junior school life. The following points should be included.1. How your junior school life is.2. Things/moments that you won’t forget.3. The regrets in the three years.4. Plans for your future.5. A natural ending.【答案】I39。m lucky to study in this beautiful school. The teachers are great. They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting. The classmates are lovely and friendly. The school life is rich and colorful. They make me happy every day. In the past three