【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 aking fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned. However, I didn’t give up, and finally I succeeded. Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears. I felt proud of cooking on my own.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以One thing I felt very proud of為題，介紹自己曾經(jīng)做過的一件令自己感到自豪的事情。作文是開放式的，題目中只給了主題，具體的寫作內(nèi)容，需要學生們自己發(fā)揮想象力去補充。審題可知，體裁是記敘文，記敘一件自己做過的事情，且是能讓自己感到自豪的，故文章應使用一般過去時，人稱以第一人稱為主。短文應由開頭、主體和結尾三部分組成，開頭引出話題；第二部分為中心，具體描述事情的過程；最后一部分簡要描寫一下自己的感受。寫作時應注意英語表達習慣和漢語是不同的，不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語式的英語，應從句子的整體結構出發(fā)，使用較常見、易于把握的簡單句結構，如主謂賓或主系表結構。為提升作文檔次，穿插使用并列句或復合句，如賓語從句、狀語從句等。或使用祈使句、非謂語動詞、感嘆句等特殊句式結構。語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，以使文意連貫?！军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求描述了自己做過的一件引以為豪的事情。短文有如下幾個特點：首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實，敘述具體，詳細，作者描寫了自己做飯給媽媽慶祝生日這件事，符合題目要求。文章分三段，第一段用一句話引出話題；第二段詳細描寫了事情的過程；最后一段寫了自己的感受。結構清晰，安排合理。其次短文里使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過去時、第一人稱敘述，注意了謂語動詞過去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動詞的過去式。語言得體，語法規(guī)范，句式結構以簡單句為主，也使用了時間狀語從句、并列句、非謂語動詞等復雜句式結構。短文中較好的句型和短語有：I will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.、To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday、Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned、Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears等。10．（廣東蛇口育才二中中考模擬）書面表達初中即將畢業(yè)，同學們都感到壓力很大。就此問題，老師要求你在英語課上做一個以“Less Pressure Makes Life Better”為題的報告，談談你的做法，與同學分享經(jīng)驗。請根據(jù)以下要求寫一份發(fā)言稿，內(nèi)容包括：1. 普遍存在的壓力：同學關系；考試2. 我過去的壓力：父母的期望；學習3. 我成功緩解壓力的辦法及效果；……要求：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和校名；2. 詞數(shù)80左右，短文的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Less Pressure Makes Better LifeHello, everyone!Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對現(xiàn)在同學們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象，以Less Pressure Makes Life Better為題，談談自己的看法，和同學們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗。審題可知，文章中應主要包括以下幾個內(nèi)容：首先介紹同學們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象；然后講述自己過去曾面對的壓力；最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱，其中具體的內(nèi)容應由學生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來補充，并用正確的英語表達出來。學生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會出發(fā)，選取生活中常見的場景進行介紹。文章應使用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時，注意根據(jù)表達的需要使用正確的時態(tài)，并變化謂語動詞的正確形式。句式結構可以簡單句結構為主，這樣的句式表達簡潔、明了，易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次，應穿插使用并列句和復合句，或使用一些復雜結構，如非謂語動詞、被動語態(tài)等。語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。【點睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，談了自己對同學們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法，并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個優(yōu)點：首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，且層次清晰，文章分成了四段，每一段的中心話題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時，謂語動詞形式準確。句式結構以簡單句為主，敘述清晰、簡潔。也使用了并列句和復合句的結構，如賓語從句、狀語從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式，如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。11．（陜西師大附中中考模擬）隨著中考的臨近，初三同學感到壓力很大， 有些人由于學習方法不當，盲目刷題或連 續(xù)熬夜，導致上課時精力不足，考試成績越發(fā)不理想。結合上述情況，請以 How to improve our study 為題寫一篇英語演講稿，向同學們提出建議。寫作要點：，課堂認真聽講，做好筆記，課后按時完成作業(yè)。，合理安排時間。3. …… 寫作要求：，意思連貫，語法正確，書寫規(guī)范；，可適當發(fā)揮。，校名等； 70 詞，開頭給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。How to improve our studyDear friends，I’m very sorry to hear that most of us have great pressure in study and don’t perform well in the Here’s my advice. Thanks for your listening!【答案】How to improve our studyAs middle school students, it is important for us to improve our study. What should we do to improve our study?First of all, we should get ready for new lessons before class. What’s more, we must listen to the teachers and take notes carefully in class. Besides, it is necessary for us to finish our homework on time after class. Last but not least, try to make study plans for ourselves and make good use of our time. Only by doing these simple things can we improve our study.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，要表達如何提高我們的學習。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如it is adj for sb to do, on time, make good use of以及first of all, what’s more, besides和last but not least。增強邏輯關系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結構是否合理，有無重復、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。12．（四川成都外國語學校中考模擬）寫作。Having studied in this school for almost three years, you are about to graduate （畢業(yè)）. There must be something that you will always remember. Please write a passage about your Junior school life. The following points should be included.1. How your junior school life is.2. Things/moments that you won’t forget.3. The regrets in the three years.4. Plans for your future.5. A natural ending.【答案】I39。m lucky to study in this beautiful school. The teachers are great. They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting. The classmates are lovely and friendly. The school life is rich and colorful. They make me happy every day. In the past three