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e person who inspired me為題,介紹一個(gè)曾經(jīng)激勵(lì)過(guò)你的人。題目中用問(wèn)題的形式給予了提示,審題可知,短文應(yīng)包括兩個(gè)部分的內(nèi)容:首先介紹這個(gè)激勵(lì)過(guò)你的人是誰(shuí),他是怎樣的一個(gè)人;然后介紹他是如何激勵(lì)你的。學(xué)生們可以這兩個(gè)問(wèn)題為提綱,發(fā)揮想象力,充實(shí)細(xì)節(jié)信息,組織語(yǔ)言,連貫成文。短文應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主來(lái)敘述,人稱是第三人稱和第一人稱,注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式的變化。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意:首先要符合題目要求,包括題目中要求的所有信息,不能遺漏要點(diǎn),可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,注意上下文的銜接。其次應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)的不同,不要按照漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯。應(yīng)該從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)入手,寫(xiě)完整的句子??梢院?jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,輔以并列句、復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次,應(yīng)使用高級(jí)詞匯以及復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。同時(shí)語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分使文意連貫、自然?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,介紹了一個(gè)曾經(jīng)激勵(lì)過(guò)自己的人。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn):首先文章內(nèi)容完整,層次清晰,短文分三段,第一段先介紹了這個(gè)人是誰(shuí),第二段描寫(xiě)了這個(gè)人身上的品質(zhì)以及對(duì)自己的應(yīng)選;最后一段結(jié)尾。各部分內(nèi)容安排合理,主次分明。其次短文中使用了正確的人稱和時(shí)態(tài),文章以第三人稱和第一人稱為主來(lái)敘述,主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí),動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,注意了第三人稱單數(shù)形式以及過(guò)去式形式的變化,語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。用詞準(zhǔn)確,語(yǔ)言得體,句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整,符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文中使用了一些較好的句型和短語(yǔ),如But the person who inspired me most, I think, is my friend Wang Peng.、Wang Peng is a small thin boy with two big black eyes.、He doesn39。t talk too much, but always keeps a smile on his face.、If I need any help for my math exercises, he is always the one that can help me out.、He also does well in many sports, such as badminton and pingpang.、He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he 。5.書(shū)面表達(dá)根據(jù)下列表格的提示,寫(xiě)一篇題為Changes in Our Hometown的英語(yǔ)短文.(80詞左右)文章內(nèi)容必須包含所給的所有信息.開(kāi)頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù).內(nèi)容要點(diǎn):過(guò)去現(xiàn)在1舊房1高樓2河水骯臟2河水清澈(clean and clear).3步行、騎自行車上班3乘公交車、小汽車上班4道路狹窄(narrow).4街道寬闊(wide),干凈整潔5居住條件(livingconditions)差5生活越來(lái)越好,環(huán)境(environment)越來(lái)越舒適.6你的感想…(寫(xiě)兩到三句)Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years,great changes have taken place in our hometown. 【答案】Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown. In the past, there used to be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were terrible. People were not rich. They went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in our hometown. We can see the clean river and the clear water . Even we can see fish in the water. There are many wide and clean roads. Our life is better and better The environment around us is more and more fortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. But I think it’s still important to remember the past. It tells that we should cherish the present life.【解析】【詳解】亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰,內(nèi)容飽滿,表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ),例如take place,in our hometown,in the past,used to be,go to do,on foot,by bike,better and better,more and more等。而I think it39。s still important to remember the past/It tells that we should cherish the present ,豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容,使表達(dá)多樣,是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)。【點(diǎn)睛】書(shū)面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英,也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開(kāi)思維,考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以,考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn),要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式,盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。6.假如你叫李華,最近你班里的美國(guó)交換生Lucy想要感受中國(guó)的傳統(tǒng)文化。周末你和父母商議后,打算邀請(qǐng)她去老舍茶館。你通過(guò)微信告知她:要去哪,在那要做什么以及何時(shí)何地見(jiàn)面。提示詞語(yǔ):Laoshe Teahouse, drink tea, Peking Opera, magic shows, gate提示問(wèn)題:Where are you going?What will you do there?When and where will you meet?【答案】Hi, Lucy! I know you like Chinese traditional culture. I want to invite you to Laoshe Teahouse this Saturday morning. We are going to drink tea, watch magic shows, enjoy Peking Opera, and eat Chinese traditional food in Laoshe Teahouse. We can experience Chinese traditional culture there. Let’s meet at the gate of Laoshe Teahouse at 8:30, OK? See you.【解析】這是一篇給材料作文,我通過(guò)微信告訴Lucy要去哪,在那里要做什么以及何時(shí)何地見(jiàn)面。結(jié)合所給材料,可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí),人稱為第一人稱,注意主謂一致問(wèn)題,句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu),注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用,比如:I want to……,We are g