【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 ox to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進(jìn)行描述，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿模约八嬖诘囊饬x。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的，在討論其如何獲得的時候要注意正確使用時態(tài)，在談?wù)撘饬x的時候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍，描述玩具槍的時候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黃布包著的玩具槍），這里用到了過去分詞作定語，作者還描述了玩具槍的功能（small plastic pills），順便還描述了自己小時候玩槍的經(jīng)歷，準(zhǔn)確使用了時態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時候不落俗套，講到了自己的家庭那時比較困難，父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的，寫作是富有感情的，也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華，表達(dá)了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家衛(wèi)國的層面，這樣的一篇作文是有深度的，能夠讓人感動的，是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。5．自信賦予人力量，帶給人快樂。擁有自信，人生處處是舞臺，生活越來越精彩。假如你是李華，請你為?？⒄Z園地“自信助我成長”專欄寫一篇短文，談?wù)勛孕诺闹匾?，分享一次使你更加自信的?jīng)歷，并說說我們?nèi)绾胃幼孕?。提示詞語：powerful，happy，believe in，keep doing提示問題：Why is it important to be confident?What experience made you more confident?How can we bee more confident?It39。s very important to be confident【答案】It’s very important to be confident. Selfconfidence can bring us courage to stick to what we do. So it’s valuable to us.When I was in Grade 7, once my teacher asked me to make a speech in class. Although I practiced it for many times at home, I still felt nervous and forgot thewords at the beginning of it. Then I breathed deeply and relaxed myself. You can’t believe how happy I was when I recalled the speech and finished it teacher thought highly of my performance and I got much encouragement from my classmates. From then on, I have bee more and more confident.To build confidence, firstly we need to clearly know about our own advantages and try to develop them. It is the most important that we should put in enough effort to what we do. Then we can finally make it and gain more confidence.【解析】本文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含表格中所提供的所有信息。靈活運(yùn)用各種句式，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各個要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確，簡潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。點(diǎn)睛：這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少，如at the beginning of； know about；make a speech等；When ；Although ；Then ；From then on,等的運(yùn)用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理；同時語言流暢，內(nèi)容完整，是一篇不錯的范文。6．假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備組織學(xué)生本周五去北京世園會參觀。你打算邀請外教 Peter參加。請用英語寫一封電子郵件，告訴他集合的時間和地點(diǎn)，在那里可以做什么，以及參觀時需要準(zhǔn)備什么。提示詞語： school gate, nature, culture, food and drink提示問題： ●When and where are you going to meet?●What are you going to do there?●What do you advise Peter to prepare for the visit?Dear Pete,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition in I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【答案】Dear Peter，How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition. We will meet at the school gate at 7:00 . this Friday. Then we will go to Beijing International Horticulture Exposition together. We can do a lot of things there. We can not only enjoy the special and beautiful plants but also learn different cultures in various indoor or outdoor shows. We plan to stay there for a whole day. You39。d better wear a pair of fortable sports shoes and take some food and drinks with you.I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】1. 題干解讀：這是一篇給材料作文，屬于應(yīng)用文寫作。本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；提示的問題就是寫作的基本方向，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮即可。2. 例文點(diǎn)評：文章采取郵件格式，時態(tài)以一般將來時態(tài)為主。語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，語言準(zhǔn)確，語意連貫，表達(dá)清楚，具有邏輯性。3. 高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：school gate；invite sb. to do；a lot of；plan to do。句型：not only…