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________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】 In recent years, many cities in China have been hit by smog frequently, which has aroused great concern among people. Smog has a bad effect on people’s health. Many people, children and the old in particular, suffer from illnesses caused by smog. Consequently, citizens are warned not to go out without wearing masks. How does it e about? Scientists have found that it is human activity that has caused this. The poisonous matters in the air mainly e as a result of people’s burning coal, driving cars, industry production and so on. What should we do to stop the situation from worsening? First, cleaner fuels for cars and stricter emission standards for factories are of vital importance. Second, for us individuals, living a green life like going to work or school by public transport is a good choice. Also planting more trees to increase green areas is necessary. I believe every contribution counts. Only if we work together will smog weather disappear pletely. 【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)提示來(lái)介紹有關(guān)霧霾的情況,題目中給出了寫(xiě)作的內(nèi)容,我們應(yīng)將這些內(nèi)容用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)。首先應(yīng)注意在短文中要包括題目中給出的所有信息,不能遺漏要點(diǎn),并注意表達(dá)的層次和條理。其次要注意使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,通過(guò)分析可知,這篇短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用原形,特別要注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式要變化,這是一個(gè)寫(xiě)作的難點(diǎn)。最后要注意英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣,英語(yǔ)句式與漢語(yǔ)在語(yǔ)序和詞性上的使用是不同的,要注意不能逐詞翻譯,寫(xiě)漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)。應(yīng)從句子整體考慮,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和句型來(lái)表達(dá),語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。還應(yīng)使用一些較好的句型或者短語(yǔ),增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力。6.書(shū)面表達(dá)假如你是李明,你的英國(guó)筆友Jack來(lái)信詢問(wèn)你的家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾天氣,情況如何。請(qǐng)你按照以下提示給他回一封。內(nèi)容如下:1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重,去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣;2. 人們已經(jīng)意識(shí)到霧霾天氣的危害,正在采取各種措施減少其發(fā)生;3. 你在日常生活中打算為此做些什么。參考詞匯:霧霾haze注意:1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱;2. 語(yǔ)言通順,句子連貫,條理清楚,書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范;3. 詞數(shù)80左右,信件的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫(xiě)信,告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn),我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示,來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言,充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重;然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施;最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段,一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一,時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一,根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí),應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,寫(xiě)完整的句子,利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次,可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句;語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫,表達(dá)流暢?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況,并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況,講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn);且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,分成了三段,每一段的中心明確,意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài),動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體,句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的