【正文】 our country .In conclusion, studying home has more advantages than studying abroad, It39。s much more beneficial and convanient to us .批改老師o(wú)scar評(píng)分90分級(jí)別優(yōu)秀評(píng)語(yǔ)批改：1. our country has gradually bee much stronger and moderner .單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤。2. The world es to be more and more smaller .比較級(jí)表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤，后邊應(yīng)該用形容詞原形。3. which we don39。t konw before 單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤。4. we can go to try the different lifestyle there as well. 首先，定冠詞多余，后邊的名詞用復(fù)數(shù)。5. we hardly have a hard time and encounter much difficultiesmuch 應(yīng)該用Many。；另外，一個(gè)很重要的語(yǔ)義錯(cuò)誤是，原句用的是Hardly，表示一個(gè)否定的意思，而這句話主要來(lái)表示在國(guó)外學(xué)習(xí)的不利之處的，因此，應(yīng)該去掉hardly.6. and also we need39。t to spend much money on study .拼寫錯(cuò)誤。7. It39。s much more beneficial and convanient to us .單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤。評(píng)析：本篇文章屬于典型的三段論，先對(duì)這種現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的描述，然后再闡述不同人的不同觀點(diǎn)，最后表述作者本人的觀點(diǎn)，因此本文作者思路清晰，用詞基本準(zhǔn)確，而且運(yùn)用了很多高級(jí)詞匯和詞組，就是注意一些單詞的拼寫錯(cuò)誤。How to learn English 竹山一中高一（15）班，第8組：李穎穎、萬(wàn)偉偉、陳淇、黃志華、楊辰、程蘭 As is known to all, English has developed into the world language, so I want to tell you the way how to learn English. First, I think the right way is of great importance. We should finish our homework on our own in time, listen to the teacher carefully in class as well as take notes, as an old saying goes, practice and hard work are always rewarded. Second, we are supposed to memorize the new words and grammar. Making good use of grammar and making up sentences are the most useful ways, if you do it like this, our grades will be improved. Maybe we will have more or less some difficulties in our studies, but we can by no means give up our dreams. Believe that the future is bright, your dream will e true some day. All things considered, learning English needs will. We are supposed to be filled with confidence, we should treat the difficulties as challenges. At last, I want to say “keep going, try your best and you will make it,”批改老師Lilaoshi評(píng)分98分級(jí)別優(yōu)秀評(píng)語(yǔ)點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，陳述清楚，使用了很多詞組和句型，增強(qiáng)了文章的可讀性。亮點(diǎn)： As is known to all, 眾所周知 （be）of great importance on one’s own 獨(dú)立地 as well as 也，和 as and old saying goes , 常言道 be supposed to do … 按理應(yīng)該 make good use of ,more or less ,e true all things considered, make it, be rewardedAbout Travel竹山一中高一(16)班,第9小組：楊禮嘉 Anderson said that “To travel is live.” Yes, we can learn a lot when we are traveling. And nowadays, travel is being more and more popular in our life. How to treat it in a right way? Does it have any advantages? Here are my opinions. There is no doubt that traveling is a good way to relax yourself. When you feel tired after working for a long time, you can go traveling to experience the beauty of nature. You can also breathe the fresh air and make friends with people who e from different places. But on the other hand, it also has some disadvantages. For example, weather changes suddenly. And sometimes you may be wetted in the heavy rain or you may lose the way and so on. On the whole, we should get ready for everything when we want to travel. We must have a good knowledge of the weather, and we must listen to the weather report before we go out. And the most important thing that we must remember is that we should go out with a panion, who can help you out of danger. Therefore, taking good care of yourself when you are outside is very important. We must have a good knowledge of traveling.批改老師Lilaoshi評(píng)分98分級(jí)別優(yōu)秀評(píng)語(yǔ) 點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文是一篇議論文，第一段提出論點(diǎn)，緊接著分析其利弊，論點(diǎn)鮮明，論據(jù)充分，論證嚴(yán)密。結(jié)尾加以總結(jié)，與論點(diǎn)相呼應(yīng)。修改： travel is live. 改為：To travel is to live. 不定式to live作表語(yǔ)。 wetted in the heavy rain. wetted改為:。 亮點(diǎn)：more and more popular there is no doubt that … 毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)…… experience the beauty of nature 體驗(yàn)大自然的美麗 on the other hand be caught in the heavy rain 淋著大雨 on the whole 總的來(lái)說(shuō) have a good knowledge of … the most important thing that we must remember is that … help sb out of danger