【正文】 適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黃布包著的玩具槍），這里用到了過去分詞作定語(yǔ)，作者還描述了玩具槍的功能（small plastic pills），順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷，準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套，講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難，父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的，寫作是富有感情的，也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華，表達(dá)了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的層面，這樣的一篇作文是有深度的，能夠讓人感動(dòng)的，是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。11．D解析：Dear DavidI39。m writing to tell you something about our discussion today.The students have their own plans about how to spend a meaningful summer vacation. Half of the students plan to travel at home and abroad. They want to relax and enjoy the beautiful scenery. Thirty percent of students plan to read more books. They believe that reading can increase knowledge. Reading books can make people smart and develop interests. 20% of them plan to take part in social practice activities. They want to exercise themselves and make new friends. I39。m going to take part in social practice activities, too. I want to learn something new and get good experience from these activities.Best wishes!YoursLi Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如how to do，spend a meaningful summer vacation，half of，plan to do，travel at home and abroad，enjoy the beautiful scenery，take part in，social practice activities，make new friends 等。而非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)The students have their own plans about how to spend a meaningful summer vacation./ Reading books can make people smart and develop believe that reading can increase ，豐富了短文內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣化，是本文的亮點(diǎn)。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章表達(dá)更有邏輯性，也更富有條理。【點(diǎn)睛】書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。12．D解析：Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來組織語(yǔ)言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，寫完整的句子，利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過去時(shí)、一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來時(shí)態(tài)，動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。13．C解析：Nowadays many teenagers show great interest in making friends online. Some people think students should make friends on line? Some people say yes. The internet helps make many friends. Chatting on line, students can more freely express their feelings and opinions, and even get help with their foreign language studies. But others think students should not. They say making friends on line is a waste of time, which should be spent more meaningfully on study. Besides, some students get cheated on line.It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things. As for friendship, we can readily find it in our classmates and other people around us.【解析】【分析】整體分析：這是一篇提綱話題作文。是一篇議論文，第一段要寫贊同學(xué)生網(wǎng)上交友的人的觀點(diǎn)，第二段要寫反對(duì)學(xué)生網(wǎng)上交友的觀點(diǎn)，第三段要表述作者自己的觀點(diǎn)?！驹斀狻勘酒魑囊笞髡呔蜕暇W(wǎng)交友發(fā)表意見，寫作之前要認(rèn)真閱讀所給提示，確定文章中心。注意文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。文章要有層次、流暢?？梢赃m當(dāng)發(fā)揮，寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文的緊密聯(lián)系，要符合邏輯關(guān)系。【點(diǎn)睛】這類作文的寫作方法要注意認(rèn)真審題，可以分三段寫：贊成；反對(duì)；你的看法。注意過渡性語(yǔ)言的使用。做到：要點(diǎn)要全，表達(dá)要清晰明確，使用短語(yǔ)，句型要準(zhǔn)確，注意避免拼寫和語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。14．D解析：Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份，給Liz Payne寫一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分：首先是介紹自己的身份；然后寫留言的目的，包括冬令營(yíng)的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座；最后簡(jiǎn)單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求，組織語(yǔ)言，串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語(yǔ)句子的表達(dá)和漢語(yǔ)習(xí)慣是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語(yǔ)和句型，保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語(yǔ)言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。穿插一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，提升文章檔次和水平，使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述：首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的；接下來詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營(yíng)的愿望；最后是一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好，那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以第一人稱、一般將來時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā)，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，符合英語(yǔ)句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級(jí)的句型，如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ；From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ；And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。15．B解析：Believe Myself, and I will winHello, everyone! As an old sayi