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era. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!Wele to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給自己的筆友Dave寫信,邀請(qǐng)他來你的家鄉(xiāng)—安徽一游,題目中列出了文章的提綱,審題可知,短文應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容敘述:首先介紹家鄉(xiāng)的位置;然后介紹來這里最好的時(shí)候;接下來是介紹家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化,并給出建議。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)合理安排幾個(gè)內(nèi)容,分清主次,并注意上下文的連貫。另外,英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,因此寫作時(shí)不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā),寫完整的句子。如可以使用簡單句結(jié)構(gòu),易于掌握,不容易出錯(cuò)。但為提升文章檔次,也應(yīng)穿插一些并列句結(jié)構(gòu)或復(fù)合句,以及使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語態(tài)等?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求邀請(qǐng)Dave來自己的家鄉(xiāng)旅游,并介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn):首先文章內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容,并對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充和修飾,使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)、豐富。短文先對(duì)Dave發(fā)出邀請(qǐng),然后具體介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的位置、景點(diǎn)、文化等,并提出了建議。全文敘述清晰,層次清楚,主次分明。第二,短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,語法規(guī)范,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整,符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來敘述,注意了謂語動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,也使用了并列句、賓語從句、狀語從句等復(fù)合句,還有一些好的句型,如The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!、I’m looking forward to seeing you here!等。14.H解析:Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對(duì)現(xiàn)在同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象,以Less Pressure Makes Life Better為題,談?wù)勛约旱目捶?,和同學(xué)們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。審題可知,文章中應(yīng)主要包括以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容:首先介紹同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象;然后講述自己過去曾面對(duì)的壓力;最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱,其中具體的內(nèi)容應(yīng)由學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來補(bǔ)充,并用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。學(xué)生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會(huì)出發(fā),選取生活中常見的場(chǎng)景進(jìn)行介紹。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí),注意根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),并變化謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,這樣的句式表達(dá)簡潔、明了,易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次,應(yīng)穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句,或使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語態(tài)等。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,談了自己對(duì)同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法,并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn):首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,且層次清晰,文章分成了四段,每一段的中心話題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí),謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,敘述清晰、簡潔。也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句的結(jié)構(gòu),如賓語從句、狀語從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式,如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。15.D解析:Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份,給Liz Payne寫一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分:首先是介紹自己的身份;然后寫留言的目的,包括冬令營的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座;最后簡單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時(shí),應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求,組織語言,串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知,這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述,時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語句子的表達(dá)和漢語習(xí)慣是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型,保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。穿插一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句式,提升文章檔次和水平,使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目要求的所有信息,沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述:首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的;接下來詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營的愿望;最后是一個(gè)簡單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好,那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章以第一人稱、一般將來時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主,謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā),語法規(guī)范,符合英語句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級(jí)的句型,如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ;From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ;And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。16.B解析:Students in our school have one thing in mon an interest in sports. But different students have different reasons for taking part in sports.Many students have sports when they feel tired after study. They just want to relax themselves and have fun. Most boys love sports. They take part in all kinds of sports in order to bee stronger. They join in the sports that interest them most, such as soccer, basketball and volleyball. As for girls, they want to lose weight. They want to keep slim, so they also like taking exercise.In my opinion, no matter what reasons we have, we all can get a lot from sports.【解析】【詳解】本篇寫作主要是談?wù)撟约簩?duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)的觀點(diǎn)和看法,應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),寫作要點(diǎn)要包括:。(多數(shù)學(xué)生的觀點(diǎn)、男生的觀點(diǎn)、女生的觀點(diǎn))。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),主謂一致,在文中使用了時(shí)間狀語從句,定語從句,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如have fun,in order to,as for,in my opinion等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,句子通順,行文連貫。17.H解析:Zhang Yang is a student in Sunshine Middle School. He is in Class 2,Grade 9. He likes reading. He spends more than seven hours a week reading all kinds of books because he thinks reading is helpful. He enjoys watching birds. He counts the number of birds twice a year to study changes in the number of birds. He donated his pocket money to the Hope Project last month. His dream is to be the chief engineer of highspeed railway connecting my hometown to Shanghai. He hopes everyone can make some changes to protect the environment. We mustn’t throw rubbish everywhere.【解析】【詳解】亮點(diǎn)說明:這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰,內(nèi)容飽滿,表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語,例如like reading,more than,all kinds of,spend time doing,enjoy doing,the number of,twice a year,be the chief engineer of等。而He spends more than seven hours a week reading all kinds of books because he thinks reading is helpful./ He hopes everyone can make some changes to protect the ,豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容,使表達(dá)多樣化,是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)。【點(diǎn)睛】書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英,也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維,考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以,考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn),要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式,盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)