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. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析:這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述,要求是進行描述,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的,在討論其如何獲得的時候要注意正確使用時態(tài),在談?wù)撘饬x的時候要注意表達的準確性,避免不熟悉的表達。寫作亮點:這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍,描述玩具槍的時候有適當?shù)募毠?jié)補充,例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth(用黃布包著的玩具槍),這里用到了過去分詞作定語,作者還描述了玩具槍的功能(small plastic pills),順便還描述了自己小時候玩槍的經(jīng)歷,準確使用了時態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時候不落俗套,講到了自己的家庭那時比較困難,父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的,寫作是富有感情的,也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華,表達了作者的期望(I hope I can be a soldier),上升到了保家衛(wèi)國的層面,這樣的一篇作文是有深度的,能夠讓人感動的,是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。9.上周,你們班就初中生能否騎電動自行車上學(xué)進行了一次討論。現(xiàn)在,請你根據(jù)下表用英語寫一篇介紹討論情況的短文。注意:;,書寫工整、規(guī)范;。生詞提示:electric 討論結(jié)果25人表示同意35人不同意理由;。,騎電動車不安全;,騎電動車也快不起來?!敬鸢浮縇ast week, our class had a discussion about whether junior students could ride electric bicycles to go to students of our class agreed with it, because they said it was convenient for them and it could takethem less time to go to school. But the other 35 students didn’t agree with them. They said it was not safe forthe junior students to get to school by electric bicycles, for they were too young. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles quickly.【解析】試題分析:本題要求以初中生能否騎電動自行車上學(xué)進行了一次討論。根據(jù)所給要點寫一篇80100詞左右的英語短文,而且要做到表達清楚,語句通順,意思連貫。根據(jù)所給要點可知,本文主要以一般過去時態(tài)書寫。要注意把每一個要點都表達出來,不要遺漏任何一個,書寫時一定注意時態(tài)的正確使用。觀點分明,談及理由按照要求至少要各寫兩點。并注意上下文要語句貫通。并且要圍繞主題適當發(fā)揮。寫作亮點:短文中作者按照題目的要求,給我們介紹了持不同觀點的學(xué)生各自的理由,結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,要點全面。時態(tài)運用正確,書寫工整規(guī)范。該文中以下幾個句子用得很好。Because they said it was convenient for them and it could take them less time to go to school. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles ,理由也很充分??键c:提綱類作文。10.現(xiàn)在智能手機(smartphone)越來越普及,很多中學(xué)生都有智能手機。請你根據(jù)下面的提示,寫一篇不少于80詞的英語短文,談一談你對智能手機的看法,可適當發(fā)揮。提示:在生活中你用智能手機做什么?智能手機對你的生活產(chǎn)生了怎樣的影響?你對中學(xué)生使用智能手機有什么看法?______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文:The smartphone is being more and more popular nowadays .I also have a smartphone .I usually use it to send text messages, play games,watch videos, listen to music and learn English .It is very useful and convenient. In fact,the smartphone makes my life colorful. However ,every coin has two I spend too much time playing games on the smartphone and get bad results in exams. So I think we students should use our smartphones properly and don’t use them too much .We should pay more attention to our studies.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇給材料作文,要求根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示,寫一篇英語短文,談一談你對智能手機的看法。文章時態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時,人稱主要用第一、第三人稱。首先認真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點;然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫作要點及每個要點中可能要用到的表達;然后緊扣要點,動筆寫作。在寫作時,注意連句成篇,保持文章的連貫性,要層次清楚,要點分明,中心突出。同時要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫太長的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡單的易拼寫的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細心復(fù)核檢查,確保正確無誤。