【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 情緒抑郁、焦慮，不 敢去學(xué)校，甚至?xí)霈F(xiàn)心理問(wèn)題等嚴(yán)重后果。 請(qǐng)以 “My opinions about school bullying” 為題， 寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，談?wù)勀愕目捶?。提示?. What do you think of school bullying?2. What will you do if you are bullied or you see somebody else being bullied?要求：1. 所給提示信息應(yīng)全部包括，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以 使行文連貫；2. 80詞以上。參考詞匯：心理問(wèn)題mental health problems . My opinions about school bullying________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】My opinions about school bullyingSchool bullying is a big problem that has got more and more attention in society. Being bullied can make students feel scared or upset. Some students are afraid of going to school. School bullying can even lead to more serious mental health problems. So how should we stop school bullying?If I see somebody being bullied or I am bullied, I will tell the teachers or my parents at once. It is not a good idea to do any bad things to the bullies on my own.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，談?wù)勀銓?duì)校園欺凌的看法。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如make sb do, be afraid of, lead to, mental health problem, at once, on one’s own, it is not a good idea to do any bad things to the bullies on my own中it作形式主語(yǔ)以及“比較級(jí)and比較級(jí)”。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．（天津中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)校園安全問(wèn)題越來(lái)越受到重視，為了確保學(xué)生的安全，學(xué)校制訂了一些規(guī)章制度。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，以“School safety”為題寫(xiě)一篇100詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文。提示：1. 遵守校規(guī)，按時(shí)到校、離校；2. 不接受陌生人的物品；3. 結(jié)伴同行，天黑前到家；4. 遇到麻煩及時(shí)告知家長(zhǎng)和老師。School safety_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】School safetyMore and more people pay special attention to the school safety nowadays. Here are some rules to keep us safe.First, as students, we should follow the school rules, such as not being late for school and leaving school early. Second, we shouldn’t go with strangers and we shouldn’t accept things from strangers. Third, it’s better for us to have partners on the way home and to school and we must get home before dark. Fourth, if we are in trouble, don’t forget to tell our parents or teachers as soon as possible.I think these rules are good for us. We must obey them.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇話題作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下校園安全。所提供的材料中列舉了為了確保學(xué)生的安全，學(xué)校制訂了一些規(guī)章制度。主要從1. 遵守校規(guī)，按時(shí)到校、離校；2. 不接受陌生人的物品；3. 結(jié)伴同行，天黑前到家；4. 遇到麻煩及時(shí)告知家長(zhǎng)和老師。這四個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為第一人稱。本文是提建議，因此用shouldn’t或should來(lái)寫(xiě)。注意作文中必須包含材料上的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性?！靖叻志湫鸵弧縎econd, we shouldn’t go with strangers and we shouldn’t accept things from strangers. 第二，我們不應(yīng)該和陌生人一起去，也不應(yīng)該接受陌生人的東西。本句話是由and連接的并列句?！靖叻志湫投縄 think these rules are good for us. 我認(rèn)為這些規(guī)則對(duì)我們有好處。句子these rules are good for 。10．（北京中考模擬）假如你是李華，即將結(jié)束在美國(guó)的交換學(xué)習(xí)，回國(guó)前你想給住家媽媽Sarah寫(xiě)封感謝信，告訴她你什么時(shí)候回國(guó)，為什么感謝她，以及你的感受。提示詞語(yǔ)： help, care, municate, drive to hospital, own family提示要點(diǎn)：When are you going to leave?Why do you want to say ‘thank you’ to her?How do you feel?Dear Sarah,I’m writing to deliver my thanks to you. Thanks again for taking care of me so well.Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Sarah,I’m writing to deliver my thanks to you. I am going to leave the US next Tuesday morning. I really want to say thanks to you because of your help and care during my stay here. I will never forget you offered to help when I had difficulty in municating with others in English, and I will never forget you drove me to the hospital in the late night when I didn’t feel well. Staying with your family is just like being with my own family, which reminds me of the saying, “East or west, home is best.”Thanks again for taking care of me so well.【解析】此文為提綱式作文，文章屬于感謝信。文章可分為三段，第一段表明寫(xiě)信的目的；第二段分析感謝的具體原因；第三段寫(xiě)出你在住家媽媽Sarah家里的感受。文章用第一人稱來(lái)寫(xiě)，時(shí)態(tài)主要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)。亮點(diǎn)分析：表示感激的句型：I’m writing to deliver my thanks to you. Thanks again for taking care of me so well.[高分句型一]I will never forget you offered to help when I had difficulty in municating with others in English. 我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記，當(dāng)我用英語(yǔ)和別人交流困難時(shí)，你主動(dòng)提出幫助我。句子中有when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句。[高分句型二]Staying w