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_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對(duì)現(xiàn)在同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象,以Less Pressure Makes Life Better為題,談?wù)勛约旱目捶?,和同學(xué)們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。審題可知,文章中應(yīng)主要包括以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容:首先介紹同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象;然后講述自己過去曾面對(duì)的壓力;最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱,其中具體的內(nèi)容應(yīng)由學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來補(bǔ)充,并用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。學(xué)生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會(huì)出發(fā),選取生活中常見的場(chǎng)景進(jìn)行介紹。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí),注意根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),并變化謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,這樣的句式表達(dá)簡潔、明了,易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次,應(yīng)穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句,或使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語態(tài)等。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,談了自己對(duì)同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法,并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn):首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,且層次清晰,文章分成了四段,每一段的中心話題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí),謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,敘述清晰、簡潔。也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句的結(jié)構(gòu),如賓語從句、狀語從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式,如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。6.書面表達(dá)根據(jù)下列表格的提示,寫一篇題為Changes in Our Hometown的英語短文.(80詞左右)文章內(nèi)容必須包含所給的所有信息.開頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù).內(nèi)容要點(diǎn):過去現(xiàn)在1舊房1高樓2河水骯臟2河水清澈(clean and clear).3步行、騎自行車上班3乘公交車、小汽車上班4道路狹窄(narrow).4街道寬闊(wide),干凈整潔5居住條件(livingconditions)差5生活越來越好,環(huán)境(environment)越來越舒適.6你的感想…(寫兩到三句)Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years,great changes have taken place in our hometown. 【答案】Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown. In the past, there used to be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were terrible. People were not rich. They went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in our hometown. We can see the clean river and the clear water . Even we can see fish in the water. There are many wide and clean roads. Our life is better and better The environment around us is more and more fortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. But I think it’s still important to remember the past. It tells that we should cherish the present life.【解析】【詳解】亮點(diǎn)說明:這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰,內(nèi)容飽滿,表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語,例如take place,in our hometown,in the past,used to be,go to do,on foot,by bike,better and better,more and more等。而I think it39。s still important to remember the past/It tells that we should cherish the present ,豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容,使表達(dá)多樣,是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)?!军c(diǎn)睛】書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英,也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維,考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以,考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn),要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式,盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。7.題目②“持之以恒,方得始?!眻?jiān)持是一種可貴的品格。生活中想要做成任何一件事情,都需要持之以恒的精神。某英文網(wǎng)站正在開展以“堅(jiān)持”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華,請(qǐng)用英語寫一篇短文投稿。談淡你在初中生活中堅(jiān)持的一件事(愛好,習(xí)慣……),你是怎樣做的,以及你的感受。提示詞語:keep, practice, difficult, give up, proud提示問題:1. What did you do?2. How do you feel?It s important for us to keep trying to achieve our goals.