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的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn),我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示,來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言,充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重;然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施;最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段,一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一,時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一,根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí),應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,寫(xiě)完整的句子,利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次,可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句;語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫,表達(dá)流暢?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況,并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況,講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn);且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,分成了三段,每一段的中心明確,意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng),作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài),動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體,句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主,也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句,長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合,使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。5.書(shū)面表達(dá)每個(gè)人都有自己心愛(ài)的物品,相信你也擁有一個(gè)自己心愛(ài)的物品吧!請(qǐng)以“A(n) _____ I have”為題,描述一個(gè)或一件你心愛(ài)的物品,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。要求:1. 請(qǐng)?jiān)陬}目空白處填上你心愛(ài)物品的名字;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)。3. 語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,短文連貫通順,80詞左右。A(n) _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A(n) toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫(xiě)作分析:這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開(kāi)描述,要求是進(jìn)行描述,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。寫(xiě)作的難度是逐漸加深的,在討論其如何獲得的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài),在談?wù)撘饬x的時(shí)候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性,避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn):這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍?zhuān)枋鐾婢邩尩臅r(shí)候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充,例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth(用黃布包著的玩具槍?zhuān)@里用到了過(guò)去分詞作定語(yǔ),作者還描述了玩具槍的功能(small plastic pills),順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷,準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套,講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難,父親是通過(guò)努力工作為我賺錢(qián)買(mǎi)槍的,寫(xiě)作是富有感情的,也通過(guò)這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華,表達(dá)了作者的期望(I hope I can be a soldier),上升到了保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的層面,這樣的一篇作文是有深度的,能夠讓人感動(dòng)的,是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。6.題目②“持之以恒,方得始?!眻?jiān)持是一種可貴的品格。生活中想要做成任何一件事情,都需要持之以恒的精神。某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以“堅(jiān)持”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華,請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿。談淡你在初中生活中堅(jiān)持的一件事(愛(ài)好,習(xí)慣……),你是怎樣做的,以及你的感受。提示詞語(yǔ):keep, practice, difficult, give up, proud提示問(wèn)題:1. What did you do?2. How do you feel?It s important for us to keep trying to achieve our goals. 【答案】It39。s important for us to keep trying to achieve our love running and I have kept running for three years.When I was in Grade 7,I was not good at sports and running was always my often failed in my running order to catch up with my classmates,I began to practice running every day after ,I was so tired that I really wanted to give I kept telling myself that I could make matter what kind of difficulties I faced,I tried my best to keep I do much better in running and I39。m very proud of feel more co