【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 l presented him with Award for Best Student this year. However, Tommy is stressed when the exam es. And he doesn’t have enough sleep. I think he should go over what he has learned before exams. It’s better for him to manage his time wisely so that he can have enough time to rest.【解析】這篇作文要求我們按照表格里的內(nèi)容介紹一下Tommy的情況，為Tommy寫一篇綜合素質(zhì)的評價(jià)報(bào)告。在表格中有非常詳細(xì)的關(guān)于Tommy各方面的內(nèi)容，我們需要用正確的英語把這些內(nèi)容有條理的表達(dá)出來。表格中涉及的內(nèi)容較多，寫作時(shí)要注意表達(dá)的條理性。這篇作文應(yīng)主要使用第三人稱來寫。在最后要給Tommy提一些建議，這一部分應(yīng)該用第一人稱。同時(shí)注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，尤其是表格中的第五項(xiàng)和第六項(xiàng)內(nèi)容。【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。這篇作文內(nèi)容完整，包含了表格中的所有內(nèi)容，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，注意了被動形式的使用，如He was rewarded by our school this year.。寫作時(shí)注意了條理性，使文章具有層次感，條理清楚。短文注意到了長短句的結(jié)合，并恰當(dāng)?shù)氖褂昧艘恍┻B詞，使文章表達(dá)的連貫。如He is always ready to help others.、He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news.、He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this 。 6．書面表達(dá)假如你是李明，你的英國筆友Jack來信詢問你的家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何。請你按照以下提示給他回一封。內(nèi)容如下：1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重，去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣；2. 人們已經(jīng)意識到霧霾天氣的危害，正在采取各種措施減少其發(fā)生；3. 你在日常生活中打算為此做些什么。參考詞匯：霧霾haze注意：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；2. 語言通順，句子連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；3. 詞數(shù)80左右，信件的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國筆友寫信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來組織語言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語動詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，寫完整的句子，利用簡單句的基本句型，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過去時(shí)、一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來時(shí)態(tài)，動詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確，語法規(guī)范。短文中語言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句，長短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government