【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 rabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對(duì)學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié)，并談?wù)勛约簩?duì)這件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個(gè)表格，里面包括了支持搶紅包這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀(guān)點(diǎn)以及反對(duì)這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀(guān)點(diǎn)和理由，只給了一些短語(yǔ)，我們需要組織語(yǔ)言，將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分：支持的人們的理由；反對(duì)者們的理由；自己的看法，可以分成兩段或者三段來(lái)敘述，這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，有層次。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)的不同，不要逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次，還應(yīng)注意使用高級(jí)句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段，第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的，因此了文章的話(huà)題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對(duì)玩這個(gè)游戲的人們各自的理由；第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式準(zhǔn)確，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主，特別注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型，如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form.、If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell 。文章中也出現(xiàn)了一些語(yǔ)法上的小錯(cuò)誤，總的來(lái)說(shuō)，不影響整篇文章的質(zhì)量。5．自信賦予人力量，帶給人快樂(lè)。擁有自信，人生處處是舞臺(tái)，生活越來(lái)越精彩。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你為?？⒄Z(yǔ)園地“自信助我成長(zhǎng)”專(zhuān)欄寫(xiě)一篇短文，談?wù)勛孕诺闹匾?，分享一次使你更加自信的?jīng)歷，并說(shuō)說(shuō)我們?nèi)绾胃幼孕?。提示詞語(yǔ)：powerful，happy，believe in，keep doing提示問(wèn)題：Why is it important to be confident?What experience made you more confident?How can we bee more confident?It39。s very important to be confident【答案】It’s very important to be confident. Selfconfidence can bring us courage to stick to what we do. So it’s valuable to us.When I was in Grade 7, once my teacher asked me to make a speech in class. Although I practiced it for many times at home, I still felt nervous and forgot thewords at the beginning of it. Then I breathed deeply and relaxed myself. You can’t believe how happy I was when I recalled the speech and finished it teacher thought highly of my performance and I got much encouragement from my classmates. From then on, I have bee more and more confident.To build confidence, firstly we need to clearly know about our own advantages and try to develop them. It is the most important that we should put in enough effort to what we do. Then we can finally make it and gain more confidence.【解析】本文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含表格中所提供的所有信息。靈活運(yùn)用各種句式，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各個(gè)要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確，簡(jiǎn)潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。點(diǎn)睛：這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如at the beginning of； know about；make a speech等；When ；Although ；Then ；From then on,等的運(yùn)用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理；同時(shí)語(yǔ)言流暢，內(nèi)容完整，是一篇不錯(cuò)的范文。6．近年來(lái)，習(xí)近平主席提出了實(shí)現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國(guó)夢(mèng)”。學(xué)校開(kāi)展了“夢(mèng)想少年”的主題演講活動(dòng)，假如你是張明，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提供的要點(diǎn)，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫(xiě)一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實(shí)際，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名。提示詞語(yǔ)： good at ..with ...rules u