【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 遍存在的壓力：同學(xué)關(guān)系；考試2. 我過(guò)去的壓力：父母的期望；學(xué)習(xí)3. 我成功緩解壓力的辦法及效果；……要求：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和校名；2. 詞數(shù)80左右，短文的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Less Pressure Makes Better LifeHello, everyone!Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對(duì)現(xiàn)在同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象，以L(fǎng)ess Pressure Makes Life Better為題，談?wù)勛约旱目捶?，和同學(xué)們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。審題可知，文章中應(yīng)主要包括以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容：首先介紹同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象；然后講述自己過(guò)去曾面對(duì)的壓力；最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱，其中具體的內(nèi)容應(yīng)由學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來(lái)補(bǔ)充，并用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)。學(xué)生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會(huì)出發(fā)，選取生活中常見(jiàn)的場(chǎng)景進(jìn)行介紹。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，注意根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，并變化謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，這樣的句式表達(dá)簡(jiǎn)潔、明了，易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句，或使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，談了自己對(duì)同學(xué)們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法，并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，且層次清晰，文章分成了四段，每一段的中心話(huà)題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，敘述清晰、簡(jiǎn)潔。也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句的結(jié)構(gòu)，如賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式，如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。6．書(shū)面表達(dá)以下圖畫(huà)呈現(xiàn)了林濤和梅梅在公園里發(fā)生的事情。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇約100詞的短文。要求：?！敬鸢浮縊ne day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the young tree. First, Meimei kept the tree straight and pushed the earth hard down with her foot. Then Lin Tao knocked a board into the earth. It said, “Please take care of trees.” After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.Trees are good for the environment. We should protect them.【解析】這是一篇看圖作文，要求我們仔細(xì)觀察圖片，弄清楚里面發(fā)生的事情，用英語(yǔ)將這些內(nèi)容完整地?cái)⑹龀鰜?lái)，并簡(jiǎn)單陳述自己從中學(xué)到的東西。因此寫(xiě)作前，要仔細(xì)看圖片，了解圖片中所發(fā)生的事情，并提煉出要點(diǎn)，列出所要用到的詞匯、短語(yǔ)等，或者列出大概的寫(xiě)作提綱。通過(guò)分析可知，這篇短文講述的是過(guò)去發(fā)生的事情，應(yīng)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過(guò)去式形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序，這樣可以使文章條理清楚。還需注意的是英語(yǔ)表達(dá)和漢語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣不同，不能逐詞去翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體考慮，使用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型，如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。在文章中點(diǎn)綴幾個(gè)并列句、復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句式，調(diào)整文章節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。語(yǔ)句之間注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，符合圖片所傳達(dá)的信息，表述準(zhǔn)確。作者在短文中敘述了林濤和梅梅兩人在公園里給小樹(shù)澆水、并掛牌子告訴人們注意保護(hù)樹(shù)木。整篇文章按照事情發(fā)生的先后順序敘述，條理清晰。文章最后的兩句話(huà)也點(diǎn)明了文章的主題。其次短文中使用了正確的