【正文】 這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。修改潤色。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。初寫短文。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。點(diǎn)睛：寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，主要講述網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)。 商品 goods。請你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章。10．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費(fèi)觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變， 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化。語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。文章最后的兩句話也點(diǎn)明了文章的主題。作者在短文中敘述了林濤和梅梅兩人在公園里給小樹澆水、并掛牌子告訴人們注意保護(hù)樹木。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。在文章中點(diǎn)綴幾個(gè)并列句、復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句式，調(diào)整文章節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。寫作時(shí)要注意按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序，這樣可以使文章條理清楚。因此寫作前，要仔細(xì)看圖片，了解圖片中所發(fā)生的事情，并提煉出要點(diǎn)，列出所要用到的詞匯、短語等，或者列出大概的寫作提綱。請用英語寫一篇約100詞的短文。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。短文中語言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國筆友寫信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。內(nèi)容如下：1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重，去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣；2. 人們已經(jīng)意識到霧霾天氣的危害，正在采取各種措施減