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______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Dear Editorial Office,I am writing to remend as The Most Popular Teacher.She is Miss Zhang.She is my English teacher. She is in her forties. Her small round glasses make her look smart. She often works to high standards and is willing to work extra hours. She is kind and helpful, too. She always helps us with our study. She loves jogging, so she looks healthy. To my surprise, she has donated blood many times since 2001. She has also decided to donate her body for medical research after her death. I really love her and I want to be a teacher like her in the future. I think Miss Zhang is the most suitable person to be the Most Popular Teacher.I hope that you agree with me. Yours sincerely,Beth,【解析】【詳解】本文是一篇給材料作文。根據(jù)編輯部策劃開“A Letter to My Teacher”專欄,邀請你以信件的形式重新投稿。文章時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時,人稱主要為第一人稱。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì),考生要做的就是用正確的英語把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。動筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料,不可遺漏要點,并可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。在寫作時,注意緊扣主題,連句成篇,要層次清楚,要點分明,中心突出。同時要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫太長的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡單的易拼寫的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查,確保正確無誤?!军c睛】點睛:首先認(rèn)真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點;然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫作要點及每個要點中可能要用到的表達(dá);然后緊扣要點,動筆寫作,在寫作過程中,要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡,必要時可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞,使文章過渡平穩(wěn),自然流暢;最后,要仔細(xì)檢查有無單詞拼寫錯誤、標(biāo)點符號誤用等,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10.書面表達(dá)(本題15分)根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作,請將作文寫在答題卡指定的位置上。為了使生活更美好,社會需要正能量(positive energy)。生活中,我們需要他人的幫助,也要學(xué)會幫助他人。請你在網(wǎng)上給What would you do?本期節(jié)目留言,內(nèi)容包括:1. 你對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法;2. 說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例;3. 呼吁大家互幫互助,彼此感恩,讓社會充滿正能量。作文要求:1.不得照抄原文;不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實名稱和學(xué)生的真實姓名。2.語句連貫,詞數(shù)80個左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出,不必抄寫在試卷上,也不計入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”(113w)【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文,描述對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵大家相互幫助,并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點詞句,如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。