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老師要求你在英語課上做一個以“Less Pressure Makes Life Better”為題的報告,談談你的做法,與同學分享經(jīng)驗。請根據(jù)以下要求寫一份發(fā)言稿,內(nèi)容包括:1. 普遍存在的壓力:同學關系;考試2. 我過去的壓力:父母的期望;學習3. 我成功緩解壓力的辦法及效果;……要求:1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和校名;2. 詞數(shù)80左右,短文的開頭已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。Less Pressure Makes Better LifeHello, everyone!Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Hello, my classmates! Pressure is a serious problem in today39。s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends. I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們針對現(xiàn)在同學們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象,以Less Pressure Makes Life Better為題,談談自己的看法,和同學們分享一下自己的經(jīng)驗。審題可知,文章中應主要包括以下幾個內(nèi)容:首先介紹同學們普遍感到壓力這種現(xiàn)象;然后講述自己過去曾面對的壓力;最后介紹自己如何成功緩解壓力。題目中只給出了大概的提綱,其中具體的內(nèi)容應由學生們自己發(fā)揮想象力來補充,并用正確的英語表達出來。學生們可以從自身的經(jīng)歷和體會出發(fā),選取生活中常見的場景進行介紹。文章應使用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時,注意根據(jù)表達的需要使用正確的時態(tài),并變化謂語動詞的正確形式。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,這樣的句式表達簡潔、明了,易于掌握。但為提升作文檔次,應穿插使用并列句和復合句,或使用一些復雜結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動詞、被動語態(tài)等。語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫?!军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,談了自己對同學們普遍感到壓力大這種現(xiàn)象的看法,并分享了自己的經(jīng)歷。短文有如下幾個優(yōu)點:首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,且層次清晰,文章分成了四段,每一段的中心話題也很明確。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱,文章主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時,謂語動詞形式準確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,敘述清晰、簡潔。也使用了并列句和復合句的結(jié)構(gòu),如賓語從句、狀語從句等。短文中使用了豐富的句式,如Some students can39。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。10.假如你叫李華,最近你班里的美國交換生Lucy想要感受中國的傳統(tǒng)文化。周末你和父母商議后,打算邀請她去老舍茶館。你通過微信告知她:要去哪,在那要做什么以及何時何地見面。提示詞語:Laoshe Teahouse, drink tea, Peking Opera, magic shows, gate提示問題:Where are you going?What will you do there?When and where will you meet?【答案】Hi, Lucy! I know you like Chinese traditional culture. I want to invite you to Laoshe Teahouse this Saturday morning. We are going to drink tea, watch magic shows, enjoy Peking Opera, and eat Chinese traditional food in Laoshe Teahouse. We can experience Chinese traditional culture there. Let’s meet at the gate of Laoshe Teahouse at 8:30, OK? See you.【解析】這是一篇給材料作文,我通過微信告訴Lucy要去哪,在那里要做什么以及何時何地見面。結(jié)合所給材料,可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時,人稱為第一人稱,注意主謂一致問題,句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動賓結(jié)構(gòu),注意一些常見句式的應用,比如:I want to……,We are going to……,We can……,Let’s meet at……等句式的應用。寫作中注意運用代詞,注意多種句式交替運用。寫作中注意敘述順序,符合邏輯關系。點睛:本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,語言簡練。開頭介紹了我想要邀請你去老舍茶館,接下來介紹我們?nèi)ツ抢镒鍪裁?,最后指出我們要在何時何地見面。此處want to do sth, invite sb to, let sb do sth, at the gate of等這些詞組的運用也讓文章增色不少。