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identally, the burden on their child and his wife is unimaginable heavy. Their child and his wife have to take care of two old couples.In my family ,my parents have a only child. I also have some happy can enjoy some delicious food by myself. But I have no playmate in my family. Sometimes. I may feel lonely.If parents have two children, they can share the burden of taking care of their parents. It would be much better. Also, twochild policy can guarantee the number of Chinese population.【解析】亮點(diǎn)說明:這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰,內(nèi)容飽滿,表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語,例如first of all,grow up,grow older,marry with,burden on,have to do, take care of,by oneself,have no playmate,the number of等。而For some families. maybe the parents are only child and they can also have only child. / when their child grows up and they grow older, their child may marry with an only child girl accidentally,/ It would be much ,豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容,使表達(dá)多樣,是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)。點(diǎn)睛:書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英,也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維,考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以,考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn),要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式,盡可能使用高級詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。15.(重慶中考模擬)書面表達(dá)(原創(chuàng))今年春節(jié),很多人加入了搶紅包的游戲,但也有人表示擔(dān)憂。學(xué)校英語??队⒄Z天地》對此進(jìn)行調(diào)查,假如你是一名??∮浾?,請你就此次調(diào)查的結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié),并談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點(diǎn)。Grabbing red packets on lineAgreement(75%) popular form of entertainment, bring more fun people closer, make more friendsDisagreement(25%)spend too much time.not have enough munication with family members, feel lonelyYour opinion1.2.提示詞:We chat 微信Grabbing red packets on line搶紅包注意:(1)詞數(shù)80左右,開頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù);(2)文章應(yīng)包括題中所提的所有要點(diǎn),可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,以使行文連貫;(3)文中請勿提及你的真實(shí)姓名、校名和其他真實(shí)信息。As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in . From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in . From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié),并談?wù)勛约簩@件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個(gè)表格,里面包括了支持搶紅包這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)以及反對這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)和理由,只給了一些短語,我們需要組織語言,將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語表達(dá)出來,并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分:支持的人們的理由;反對者們的理由;自己的看法,可以分成兩段或者三段來敘述,這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚,有層次。寫作時(shí),應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語的不同,不要逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā),以簡單句為主,穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次,還應(yīng)注意使用高級句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段,第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的,因此了文章的話題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對玩這個(gè)游戲的人們各自的理由;第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語言得體,句式準(zhǔn)確,符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主,特別注意了謂語動詞的正確形式,語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型,如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form.、If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell 。文章中也出現(xiàn)了一些語法上的小錯(cuò)誤,總的來說,不影響整篇文章的質(zhì)量。16.(河南中考模擬)書面表達(dá)每個(gè)人都有自己心愛的物品,相信你也擁有一個(gè)自己心愛的物品吧!請以“A(n) _____ I have”為題,描述一個(gè)或一件你心愛的物品,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。要求:1. 請?jiān)陬}目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。3. 語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,短文連貫通順,80詞左右。A(n) _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A(n) toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time