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books on the Internet next month. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, the books on the Internet are cheaper than those in the bookstore. On the other hand, there are all kinds of books, so we needn’t go from one bookstore to another .Best wishes!Yours,Cathy【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向外教介紹俱樂(lè)部中讀書交流會(huì)的活動(dòng),并且告訴外教同學(xué)們現(xiàn)在喜歡網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書并闡述網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書的好處。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如bought sth for sb, be grateful to, be going to do, share sth with sb, be fond of, as far as I am concerned, on the one hand...on the other hand, from to以及we had a reading party,which was held on Friday in our reading room中which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了,在寫作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9.書面表達(dá)為感受母愛(ài)情深,弘揚(yáng)知恩圖報(bào),某英語(yǔ)網(wǎng)站正在舉辦以MyMother為主題的征文活動(dòng),請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列思維導(dǎo)圖所提供的信息,寫一篇短文,介紹你的母親和你之間的故事。參考詞匯:givemuchto…,It39。smyturnto…,trymybestto…提示:1)短文內(nèi)容須包括所給內(nèi)容,含母親曾為你所做的事和你將為母親所做的事各一件,并闡述原因;2)請(qǐng)注意短文結(jié)構(gòu)層次、時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用和卷面整潔度;3)詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右,短文開(kāi)頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù);4)文中不得出現(xiàn)學(xué)校和個(gè)人的相關(guān)信息。MyMotherWeneedlove.Wealsoneedtoshowlove.ThepersonIlovemostismymother.___.【答案】My motherWe need love.We also need toshow love.The person I love most is my mother.My mother is 41 years old.She is of medium build with long black hair.She is quiet.She is a history teacher in a middle school.She likes dancing.She can cook delicious food.She did a lot for me when I was a child.She bought whatever I needed for my study,even though she didn39。t have much money.She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend.She cooked delicious and healthy food for me.When I grow up,I will do what I can to make my mother happy.I will find a good job after I graduate from college.I39。ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young.I39。ll take her to wonderful sights around China.Most importantly,I will stay with her when I have free time.That39。s what she wants most,I think.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇給材料作文。為感受母愛(ài)情深,弘揚(yáng)知恩圖報(bào),要求以MyMother為主題寫一篇短文介紹你的母親和你之間的故事,參加某英語(yǔ)網(wǎng)站正在舉辦的征文活動(dòng)。在寫作時(shí),注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài);注意連句成篇,保持文章的連貫性,要層次清楚,要點(diǎn)分明,中心突出。同時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫太長(zhǎng)的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡(jiǎn)單的易拼寫的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩?!军c(diǎn)睛】首先認(rèn)真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn);然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá);然后緊扣要點(diǎn),動(dòng)筆寫作,在寫作過(guò)程中,要注意句與句、段與段之間的過(guò)渡,必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞,使文章過(guò)渡平穩(wěn),自然流暢;同時(shí)注意語(yǔ)句要通順,詞匯書寫無(wú)誤,不要出現(xiàn)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查,確保正確無(wú)誤。10.寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文,標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”,請(qǐng)你寫一篇英文稿件,內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意:1.詞數(shù):100左右(題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))?!敬鸢浮縇ast summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問(wèn)題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開(kāi)心快樂(lè)的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個(gè)問(wèn)題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問(wèn)題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時(shí)也要注意在描述過(guò)去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)。寫作亮點(diǎn):既然這是一篇記敘文,就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事,需要加上必要的背景,指明時(shí)間(Last summer),地點(diǎn)(in rural area),簡(jiǎn)要概括事件(teach children English),這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆,信息量豐富。短語(yǔ)和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少,例如“adjust to…”(調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…),“as time went by”(隨著時(shí)間的流逝),“made great progress”(取得巨大進(jìn)步),“keep on learning”(繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)),“In a word”(總而言之)等等短語(yǔ)使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度,表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂(lè)于參與,這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,表意更加清晰。