【正文】 站正在開(kāi)展以“Going Green”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，談?wù)勎覀兠媾R的主要環(huán)境問(wèn)題是什么，為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么，以及你的期望。提示詞語(yǔ)： pollution, protect, save, recycle, take action提示問(wèn)題：● What are the main environmental problems we have?● What can we do in our daily life? ● What’s your wish?Now there are many environmental 【答案】例文Now there are many environmental problems. Such as air pollution, water pollution and so on.I believe that there are many things we can do in our daily life, we can save energy by go to school by bike or on foot. We can use less water by turning off the tap while we brush our teeth, and taking shorter showers. When we see litter on the ground, we must pick it up and put it into different bins. I hope everyone can take action. Although each one of us may only do a little, together we can make a big difference. Let’s work together to make a better place to live.【解析】【詳解】題干解讀：該題目屬于說(shuō)明文寫(xiě)作，寫(xiě)作時(shí)要把我們面臨的主要環(huán)境問(wèn)題是什么，為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么，以及你的期望全部包括。例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：例文采用的是三段式；用第一人稱來(lái)敘述為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么；時(shí)態(tài)采用的是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述建議時(shí)，描寫(xiě)具體，條理清晰。高分亮點(diǎn)：短語(yǔ)：save energy；brush our teeth；put it into different bins；take action；make a big difference。句型：When we see litter on the ground, we must pick it up and put it into different bins；Although each one of us may only do a little, together we can make a big difference。【點(diǎn)睛】首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)，例如save energy；brush our teeth；put it into different bins；take action；make a big difference。以及狀語(yǔ)從句等；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作，在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中，要注意句與句、段與段之間的過(guò)渡，必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞，使文章過(guò)渡平穩(wěn)，自然流暢；最后，要仔細(xì)檢查有無(wú)單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10．書(shū)面表達(dá)假如你是英語(yǔ)俱樂(lè)部的Cathy,上周五你們收到了外教Angel為同學(xué)們網(wǎng)購(gòu)的英文書(shū)籍。俱樂(lè)部的同學(xué)們很喜歡網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)這種便捷的方式，并打算在本周五交流讀書(shū)后的感受。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下信息, 給Angel寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，告訴她俱樂(lè)部的活動(dòng)情況，并說(shuō)說(shuō)網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)的好處。寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：1表達(dá)收到圖書(shū)后的喜悅與感激之情。2介紹活動(dòng)的情況：（l）上周五，俱樂(lè)部成員們一起讀英文書(shū)。（2）本周五的下午3點(diǎn)，大家將共同交流讀書(shū)的體會(huì)。（3）同學(xué)們將在下個(gè)月網(wǎng)購(gòu)其他的英文書(shū)。3說(shuō)一說(shuō)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)書(shū)有什么好處。寫(xiě)作要求：1不得使用真實(shí)的姓名和學(xué)校名。2可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫。3字跡工整、語(yǔ)言精練、表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、條理清晰。4至少80詞。Dear Angel,How are you doing? Best wishes!Yours,Cathy【答案】Dear Angel,How are you doing? I’m writing to tell you that we received the books that you bought for us. We are grateful to you and all of us are very happy。Last Friday，we had a reading party, which was held on Friday in our reading room. Then we are going to hold an activity to share the feeling with others at 3:00 on Friday afternoon. All of us are fond of buying books on the Internet. We are going to buy some books on the Internet next month. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, the books on the Internet are cheaper than those in the bookstore. On the other hand, there are all kinds of books, so we needn’t go from one bookstore to another .Best wishes!Yours,Cathy【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，向外教介紹俱樂(lè)部中讀書(shū)交流會(huì)的活動(dòng)，并且告訴外教同學(xué)們現(xiàn)在喜歡網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)并闡述網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)的好處。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如bought sth for sb, be grateful to, be going to do, share sth with sb, be fond of, as far as I am concerned, on the one hand...on the other hand, from to以及we had a reading party,which was held on Friday in our reading room中which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。