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下:1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重,去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣;2. 人們已經(jīng)意識到霧霾天氣的危害,正在采取各種措施減少其發(fā)生;3. 你在日常生活中打算為此做些什么。參考詞匯:霧霾haze注意:1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱;2. 語言通順,句子連貫,條理清楚,書寫規(guī)范;3. 詞數(shù)80左右,信件的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國筆友寫信,告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個要點,我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點提示,來組織語言,充實內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重;然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施;最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段,一個內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一,時態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一,根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時態(tài),注意謂語動詞的正確形式。寫作時,應(yīng)注意英語句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,寫完整的句子,利用簡單句的基本句型,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語。為提升文章檔次,可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句;語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫,表達(dá)流暢?!军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況,并結(jié)合自身的實際情況,講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,沒有遺漏要點;且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,分成了三段,每一段的中心明確,意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱,作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過去時、一般將來時態(tài)和一般將來時態(tài),動詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,語法規(guī)范。短文中語言得體,句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句,長短句結(jié)合,使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。10.書面表達(dá)以下圖畫呈現(xiàn)了林濤和梅梅在公園里發(fā)生的事情。請用英語寫一篇約100詞的短文。要求:?!敬鸢浮縊ne day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the young tree. First, Meimei kept the tree straight and pushed the earth hard down with her foot. Then Lin Tao knocked a board into the earth. It said, “Please take care of trees.” After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.Trees are good for the environment. We should protect them.【解析】這是一篇看圖作文,要求我們仔細(xì)觀察圖片,弄清楚里面發(fā)生的事情,用英語將這些內(nèi)容完整地敘述出來,并簡單陳述自己從中學(xué)到的東西。因此寫作前,要仔細(xì)看圖片,了解圖片中所發(fā)生的事情,并提煉出要點,列出所要用到的詞匯、短語等,或者列出大概的寫作提綱。通過分析可知,這篇短文講述的是過去發(fā)生的事情,應(yīng)用一般過去時態(tài),注意謂語動詞形式的變化,尤其是不規(guī)則動詞的過去式形式。寫作時要注意按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序,這樣可以使文章條理清楚。還需注意的是英語表達(dá)和漢語的習(xí)慣不同,不能逐詞去翻譯,應(yīng)從句子整體考慮,使用簡單句的基本句型,如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。在文章中點綴幾個并列句、復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句式,調(diào)整文章節(jié)奏,提升文章檔次。語句之間注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。點睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,符合圖片所傳達(dá)的信息,表述準(zhǔn)確。作者在短文中敘述了林濤和梅梅兩人在公園里給小樹澆水、并掛牌子告訴人們注意保護(hù)樹木。整篇文章按照事情發(fā)生的先后順序敘述,條理清晰。文章最后的兩句話也點明了文章的主題。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱,文章以一般過去時態(tài)為主,謂語動詞用了過去式,尤其是注意了不規(guī)則動詞過去式的形式,如found, kept, got, were, spoke等。語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中還使用了較豐富的句型和短語,如They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to ;再如So they decided to do something for the young tree這句話中使用了句型decided to do ;After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of that, speak highly of等等。