【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 improved a lot. Everyone plays an important role in building our city, so good behaviors can be seen everywhere.As junior high students, on the one hand, there are a lot of things we can do. We should be polite to others and try to behave well. It’s kind of you to help people in need. Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier. Also, we can plant more trees and keep off grass. On the other hand, there are many things we shouldn’t do. We shouldn’t make a lot of noise loudly in the public. We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic rules.Let’s take action now. Our actions can make a difference and lead to a more beautiful city.【解析】【詳解】瓊海正在進(jìn)行“雙創(chuàng)”活動，即創(chuàng)建文明城市、創(chuàng)建健康城市，城市的生活環(huán)境有了很大的改變。這篇作文要求我們用英語寫一篇短文，號召中學(xué)生們都參加到“雙創(chuàng)”活動中來。題目中并沒有規(guī)定具體的寫作內(nèi)容，而是用圖表的形式，列出了寫作的提綱。通過審題可知，這篇短文我們應(yīng)從兩個方面來敘述：即應(yīng)該做什么；不應(yīng)該做什么。根據(jù)這個內(nèi)容，寫作時，把短文分成兩個層次，這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、條理。整篇短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第一人稱we來敘述。寫作時應(yīng)注意：首先英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，寫漢語式的英語，而應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)考慮，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型，以常見的主謂賓或者主系表構(gòu)成的簡單句為主，穿插使用并列句或者復(fù)合句，改變文章節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫、流暢?！军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，向中學(xué)生們發(fā)出號召，共同參與到城市“雙創(chuàng)”活動中來。首先短文的內(nèi)容完整，文章根據(jù)題目中列出的圖表，補(bǔ)充了具體的寫作內(nèi)容，從應(yīng)該做的和不應(yīng)該做的兩個方面，對中學(xué)生的日常行為提出了要求。文章條理清晰，有層次。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，語言準(zhǔn)確，語句通順，符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文中句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主，也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句以及一些較復(fù)雜的高級句式，語句之間也使用了較好的連接成分，如We should be polite to others and try to behave well. 、It’s kind of you to help people in need. 、Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier.、We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic 。5．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變， 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化?！熬W(wǎng)購”已成為一種時尚，越來越多的學(xué)生也加入到網(wǎng)購群體中。請你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章。優(yōu)點（advantage）；節(jié)約時間；避免擁擠、勞累，品種多缺點（disadvantage）， 看不到商品本身， 造成浪費你的觀點……提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購shopping online。 商品 goods。 導(dǎo)致 cause注意：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；；：100詞左右，文章開頭已給出，但不計入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，主要講述網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點和缺點。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。點睛：寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。6．近年來，習(xí)近平主席提出了實現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國夢”。學(xué)校開展了“夢想少年”的主題演講活動，假如你是張明，請根據(jù)以下提供的要點，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實際，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名和校名。提示詞語： good at ..with ...rules up popular with... to do something【答案】I39。m a Dream Teenager Good morning， dear teachers and friends， I am Zhang Ming． It39。s great honor for me to make a speech here． As a fifteenyearold boy， my dream is to be a good teacher． To make my dream e true， I study hard at school and I am good at all my subjects． Also， I am an outgoing and healthy boy who likes football very much， and I really enjoy sports． At school， I always follow the school rules， so I am popular with my classmates and teachers． On weekends， I39。d like to help people． For example， I volunteer to visit sick children in the hospital and cheer them up．In a word， I believe that the man who holds his dream will