【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 ious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫(xiě)信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，寫(xiě)完整的句子，利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。6．俗話說(shuō)，國(guó)有國(guó)法，家有家規(guī)。家規(guī)是中華民族傳統(tǒng)文化的重要組成部分。我們的國(guó)家主席習(xí)近平多次強(qiáng)調(diào)良好家風(fēng)家規(guī)的重要性。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格內(nèi)的要點(diǎn)提示，并結(jié)合你的家庭實(shí)際情況，給你的英國(guó)筆友Sam寫(xiě)一封信，向他介紹一下你的家規(guī)，并向他展示一個(gè)溫情智慧的中國(guó)家庭。要點(diǎn)提示：三條家規(guī)尊老愛(ài)幼，禮貌待人誠(chéng)實(shí)守信，不斷學(xué)習(xí)按時(shí)作息，杜絕熬夜你對(duì)你家家規(guī)的看法......簡(jiǎn)單闡述你是如何受益的......寫(xiě)作要求:，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使行文流暢、通順；；。文章的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of our Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of you Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow. First, you should respect the old and love the young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next, it’s a good habit to be honest and keep your words. What’s more, you should keep studying , go to bed and get up on time. You mustn’t stay up too late.In my opinion, every family must keep rules and children shouldn’t develop bad habits, like telling lies and be rude to others. We should be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個(gè)溫情的中國(guó)家庭。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語(yǔ)。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。