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I join a cycling club, and often go out with other members. While cycling, we can forget our worries and have fun together. Also, we can learn to be a part of a team and help each other.Whatever you do, remember to stay safe. When you’re outside, it’s better to be with your parents or friends.【解析】試題分析:本篇書面表達(dá)以“outdoor activities”為話題,結(jié)合所給的寫作材料,寫一篇報(bào)刊征文稿。根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示可知本文會使用到一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài),注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意連詞、固定短語的交替使用,使文意連接緊密,還要注意使用豐富的語句,注意敘述順序,符合邏輯關(guān)系,最后最好要表達(dá)出人物的感想和看法。寫作亮點(diǎn):本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,語言簡練、要點(diǎn)齊全。文中in the natural world, not only…but also, get out, such as, also等詞(組)的恰當(dāng)使用,使上下文意連接緊密;本文還采用了豐富的句型,比如:It is +形容詞+(for sb.) to do sth.;There be句型;時間狀語從句等復(fù)合句,大大增加了信息的容量,使文章增色不少,這是一篇不錯的范文。5.書面表達(dá)(原創(chuàng))今年春節(jié),很多人加入了搶紅包的游戲,但也有人表示擔(dān)憂。學(xué)校英語??队⒄Z天地》對此進(jìn)行調(diào)查,假如你是一名??∮浾?,請你就此次調(diào)查的結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié),并談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點(diǎn)。Grabbing red packets on lineAgreement(75%) popular form of entertainment, bring more fun people closer, make more friendsDisagreement(25%)spend too much time.not have enough munication with family members, feel lonelyYour opinion1.2.提示詞:We chat 微信Grabbing red packets on line搶紅包注意:(1)詞數(shù)80左右,開頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù);(2)文章應(yīng)包括題中所提的所有要點(diǎn),可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,以使行文連貫;(3)文中請勿提及你的真實(shí)姓名、校名和其他真實(shí)信息。As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in 2016. From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in 2016. From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié),并談?wù)勛约簩@件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個表格,里面包括了支持搶紅包這個游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)以及反對這個游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)和理由,只給了一些短語,我們需要組織語言,將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語表達(dá)出來,并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分:支持的人們的理由;反對者們的理由;自己的看法,可以分成兩段或者三段來敘述,這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚,有層次。寫作時,應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語的不同,不要逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā),以簡單句為主,穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次,還應(yīng)注意使用高級句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段,第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的,因此了文章的話題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對玩這個游戲的人們各自的理由;第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語言得體,句式準(zhǔn)確,符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主,特別注意了謂語動詞的正確形式,語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型,如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form.、If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell 。文章中也出現(xiàn)了一些語法上的小錯誤,總的來說,不影響整篇文章的質(zhì)量。6.環(huán)境保護(hù)人人有責(zé), 如果我們每一個人都能珍愛美麗地球 保護(hù)自然資源,相信我