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有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,語(yǔ)法規(guī)范,用詞準(zhǔn)確,注意了動(dòng)詞正確形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整,符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確、得體,表達(dá)自然、流暢。短文中使用了豐富的句型和短語(yǔ),如The teachers are very friendly and they are ready to help me. The most unforgettable thing is that I got a chance of being an exchange students and spent two months in , we kept in touch with each other through s. Besides, I was not good at Chinese also wish I can do better in all subjects when I am in high school and can go to a good 。5.書面表達(dá)每個(gè)人都有自己心愛的物品,相信你也擁有一個(gè)自己心愛的物品吧!請(qǐng)以“A(n) _____ I have”為題,描述一個(gè)或一件你心愛的物品,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。要求:1. 請(qǐng)?jiān)陬}目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。3. 語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,短文連貫通順,80詞左右。A(n) _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A(n) toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析:這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述,要求是進(jìn)行描述,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的,在討論其如何獲得的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài),在談?wù)撘饬x的時(shí)候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性,避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn):這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍,描述玩具槍的時(shí)候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充,例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth(用黃布包著的玩具槍),這里用到了過(guò)去分詞作定語(yǔ),作者還描述了玩具槍的功能(small plastic pills),順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷,準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套,講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難,父親是通過(guò)努力工作為我賺錢買槍的,寫作是富有感情的,也通過(guò)這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華,表達(dá)了作者的期望(I hope I can be a soldier),上升到了保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的層面,這樣的一篇作文是有深度的,能夠讓人感動(dòng)的,是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。6.2019年2月20日,中央宣傳部授予北京榜樣優(yōu)秀群體“時(shí)代楷?!狈Q號(hào)。時(shí)代楷模充分體現(xiàn)“愛國(guó)、敬業(yè)、誠(chéng)信、友善”的價(jià)值準(zhǔn)則。某網(wǎng)站正在開展以“向時(shí)代楷模學(xué)習(xí)”為主題的英語(yǔ)征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華,請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文投稿,談?wù)勆钪心阍撛趺醋觯约斑@樣做的意義。提示詞語(yǔ):pick up, rubbish, study, honest, important提示問(wèn)題:● What should you do in your daily life? ● Why do you do so? As a middle student, I can do a lot to learn from our role models. 【答案】例文As a middle student, I can do a lot to learn from our role models. First, we can protect the environment. For example, we can p