【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 ____________Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份，給Liz Payne寫一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分：首先是介紹自己的身份；然后寫留言的目的，包括冬令營(yíng)的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座；最后簡(jiǎn)單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求，組織語言，串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語句子的表達(dá)和漢語習(xí)慣是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型，保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。穿插一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，提升文章檔次和水平，使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述：首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的；接下來詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營(yíng)的愿望；最后是一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好，那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以第一人稱、一般將來時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā)，語法規(guī)范，符合英語句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級(jí)的句型，如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ；From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ；And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。6．書面表達(dá)每個(gè)人都有自己心愛的物品，相信你也擁有一個(gè)自己心愛的物品吧！請(qǐng)以“A（n） _____ I have”為題，描述一個(gè)或一件你心愛的物品，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?，以及它存在的意義。要求：1. 請(qǐng)?jiān)陬}目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。3. 語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，短文連貫通順，80詞左右。A（n） _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A（n） toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進(jìn)行描述，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?，以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的，在討論其如何獲得的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài)，在談?wù)撘饬x的時(shí)候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍，描述玩具槍的時(shí)候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黃布包著的玩具槍），這里用到了過去分詞作定語，作者還描述了玩具槍的功能（small plastic pills），順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷，準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套，講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難，父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的，寫作是富有感情的，也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華，表達(dá)了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的層面，這樣的一篇