【正文】 early every morning. In class she likes to ask her teachers some questions. After school she always exercises （for a long time）. After supper she helps her parents with housework. （She is really a good girl. ）But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. （This makes her parents unhappy. ）I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將張穎的情況介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知，本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第三人稱進行敘述，寫作中主語時態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點，做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。【亮點說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式，如：be glad to do sth高興做某事；a lot of許多；get up起床等。本文中時間詞如After supper，Sometimes，in the evening等的巧妙使用，使得本文看起來邏輯清楚，條理分明。在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理.考點：考查提綱類作文10．你是一位九年級的學(xué)生李明，你用英語寫一封郵件給你的筆友Amy，感謝她對你關(guān)心，并告訴她目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí)，并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。要點如下： （1）. 雖然你大部分功課你都學(xué)得比較好，但是你對自己不滿意。你認(rèn)為自己學(xué)習(xí)上還要多花工夫。 （2）. 你的父母對你嚴(yán)格要求，但是也很關(guān)心你。（舉例說明，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句）…… （3）. 老師很樂意幫助你們。他們希望你們實現(xiàn)自己的理想。他們說（適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句）……注意： （1）. 要求語句通順，意思連貫。 （2）. 第2要點和第3要點要用2—3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 （3）. 詞數(shù)90個左右，郵件開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。s important not to be afraid of any kind of difficulty. How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，告訴艾米目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí)，并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如get good results, spend+時間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等，增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。