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要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9.寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文,標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”,請(qǐng)你寫一篇英文稿件,內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意:1.詞數(shù):100左右(題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))?!敬鸢浮縇ast summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個(gè)問題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時(shí)也要注意在描述過去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過去時(shí)態(tài)。寫作亮點(diǎn):既然這是一篇記敘文,就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事,需要加上必要的背景,指明時(shí)間(Last summer),地點(diǎn)(in rural area),簡要概括事件(teach children English),這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆,信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少,例如“adjust to…”(調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…),“as time went by”(隨著時(shí)間的流逝),“made great progress”(取得巨大進(jìn)步),“keep on learning”(繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)),“In a word”(總而言之)等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度,表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂于參與,這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,表意更加清晰。10.你是一位九年級(jí)的學(xué)生李明,你用英語寫一封郵件給你的筆友Amy,感謝她對(duì)你關(guān)心,并告訴她目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí),并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。要點(diǎn)如下: (1). 雖然你大部分功課你都學(xué)得比較好,但是你對(duì)自己不滿意。你認(rèn)為自己學(xué)習(xí)上還要多花工夫。 (2). 你的父母對(duì)你嚴(yán)格要求,但是也很關(guān)心你。(舉例說明,適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句)…… (3). 老師很樂意幫助你們。他們希望你們實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的理想。他們說(適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句)……注意: (1). 要求語句通順,意思連貫。 (2). 第2要點(diǎn)和第3要點(diǎn)要用2—3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 (3). 詞數(shù)90個(gè)左右,郵件開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。s important not to be afraid of any kind of difficulty. How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,告訴艾米目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí),并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如get good results, spend+時(shí)間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等,增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。