【正文】 節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫、流暢?！军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，向中學(xué)生們發(fā)出號召，共同參與到城市“雙創(chuàng)”活動中來。首先短文的內(nèi)容完整，文章根據(jù)題目中列出的圖表，補充了具體的寫作內(nèi)容，從應(yīng)該做的和不應(yīng)該做的兩個方面，對中學(xué)生的日常行為提出了要求。文章條理清晰，有層次。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，語言準確，語句通順，符合英語的表達習(xí)慣。短文中句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主，也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句以及一些較復(fù)雜的高級句式，語句之間也使用了較好的連接成分，如We should be polite to others and try to behave well. 、It’s kind of you to help people in need. 、Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier.、We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic 。9．近年來，習(xí)近平主席提出了實現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國夢”。學(xué)校開展了“夢想少年”的主題演講活動，假如你是張明，請根據(jù)以下提供的要點，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實際，適當發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名和校名。提示詞語： good at ..with ...rules up popular with... to do something【答案】I39。m a Dream Teenager Good morning， dear teachers and friends， I am Zhang Ming． It39。s great honor for me to make a speech here． As a fifteenyearold boy， my dream is to be a good teacher． To make my dream e true， I study hard at school and I am good at all my subjects． Also， I am an outgoing and healthy boy who likes football very much， and I really enjoy sports． At school， I always follow the school rules， so I am popular with my classmates and teachers． On weekends， I39。d like to help people． For example， I volunteer to visit sick children in the hospital and cheer them up．In a word， I believe that the man who holds his dream will be able to achieve his dream one day． That39。s all． Thank you!【解析】【詳解】這是一篇圖表作文。學(xué)校開展“夢想少年”的主題演講活動，假如你是張明，要求根據(jù)圖表提示內(nèi)容，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇短文，向大家推介自己。根據(jù)所給出的材料提示可知文章時態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時，人稱主要為第一、第三人稱。首先認真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點及每個要點中可能要用到的表達；然后緊扣要點，動筆寫作。在寫作過程中，要將圖表內(nèi)提示信息用英語正確的表達出來，要涵蓋圖表中提到的所有要點，注意理順要點，防止漏寫。同時要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達習(xí)慣；盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，最好不要寫太長的復(fù)合句；盡量選取簡單的易拼寫的單詞，確保正確率；詞匯、句式要豐富多樣，可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細心復(fù)核檢查，確保正確無誤。10．書面表達“Life is like a box of of never know what you are going to get next.”Forrest Gump 中文譯名：《阿甘正傳》“Hope is a good thing. Maybe the best of things and no good thing ever dies.”The Shawshank Kedemption 中文譯名：《肖申克的救贖》“We are all running very hard. We are all dream chasers（追夢人）.”President Xi Jingping以上材料告訴我們：生活是豐富多彩的，有快樂幸福也有傷心失落。但既然選擇了遠方，便只顧風(fēng)雨兼程。所以在學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，我們要滿懷希望、努力奔跑、追逐夢想。請以Dream Chaser為題，談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點。要點提示：，并努力讓它成為現(xiàn)實；，使自己不斷強大；，積極參加社會活動；。寫作要求：，可適當發(fā)揮使行文連貫； ，字跡工整，詞數(shù)不少于80；，不計入總詞數(shù)；。Dream ChaserAs we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel ______________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel upset. In order to make our dream e true, firstly we should set a practical goal. But just having a goal is not enough. More importantly, we need to study hard to make ourselves stronger. Besides, as teenagers, it is necessary for us to take part in more social activities. We can learn a lot from each other by joining in those social activities. However, there will be many difficulties in both our daily life and study, so please keep patient and be brave to face these challenges. Finally, all our efforts are meaningful and one day our dream will be achieved.【解析】【詳解】：這是一篇材料作文。主要說明要有自己的目標，努力實現(xiàn)目標應(yīng)做到勤奮學(xué)習(xí)，使自己不斷強大；正確面對困難，積極參加社會活動。：例文用第一人稱來敘述主要內(nèi)容；時態(tài)采用一般現(xiàn)在時為主，主要講述如何實現(xiàn)自己的目標（Firstly,…More importantly,…Besides,…Finally,…）。承接文章開頭，句意完整，避免漢語式英語，敘述條理清晰。：高分短語：feel satisfied；feel upset；e true；set a practical goal；both…and…；keep patient。高分句型：It is +adj. + for sb. +to do sth.；there be句型；祈使句；need to do sth.。