【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 om morning to evening every day.You are ready to help people in need. You teach me to be a kind person. In the past, I never said I love you to you. But today is your birthday, I want to say it to you loudly. I will study harder to get better results. I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.【解析】【詳解】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如in your life，take care of, all the time，have problems with，in order to，work hard，from morning to evening，be ready to，in need，in the past，get better results等。而復(fù)雜并列結(jié)構(gòu)In the past, I never said I love you to you. But today is your birthday, I want to say it to you give me life and take care of me all the time, when I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me./ I hope you will be happy and healthy ，豐富了短文內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣化，是本文的亮點(diǎn)。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章表達(dá)更有邏輯性，也更富有條理。【點(diǎn)睛】書(shū)面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開(kāi)思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。9．（廣東中考模擬）假設(shè)你是來(lái)自中國(guó)的中學(xué)生李華,打算參加當(dāng)?shù)亟M織的國(guó)外冬令營(yíng),看完了這個(gè)網(wǎng)頁(yè)后,你打算給Liz Payne留言,表達(dá)你在冬令營(yíng)期間想去London Canal Museum參觀的愿望。內(nèi)容包括：；（包含冬令營(yíng)的時(shí)間,聽(tīng)Liz Payne的講座）；。作文要求：；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實(shí)的名稱(chēng)和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名；,詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。作文的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù),也不必抄寫(xiě)在答題卡上。Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua,_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份，給Liz Payne寫(xiě)一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分：首先是介紹自己的身份；然后寫(xiě)留言的目的，包括冬令營(yíng)的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽(tīng)Liz Payne的講座；最后簡(jiǎn)單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求，組織語(yǔ)言，串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過(guò)分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱(chēng)I來(lái)敘述，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語(yǔ)句子的表達(dá)和漢語(yǔ)習(xí)慣是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語(yǔ)和句型，保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語(yǔ)言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。穿插一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，提升文章檔次和水平，使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目要求的所有信息，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述：首先介紹了自己的身份和寫(xiě)留言的目的；接下來(lái)詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營(yíng)的愿望；最后是一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好，那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，文章以第一人稱(chēng)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā)，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，符合英語(yǔ)句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級(jí)的句型，如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ；From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ；And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。10．（江蘇中考模擬）俗話(huà)說(shuō)，國(guó)有國(guó)法，家有家規(guī)。家規(guī)是中華民族傳統(tǒng)文化的重要組成部分。我們的國(guó)家主席習(xí)近平多次強(qiáng)調(diào)良好家風(fēng)家規(guī)的重要性。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格內(nèi)的要點(diǎn)提示，并結(jié)合你的家庭實(shí)際情況，給你的英國(guó)筆友Sam寫(xiě)一封信，向他介紹一下你的家規(guī)，并向他展示一個(gè)溫情智慧的中國(guó)家庭。要點(diǎn)提示：三條家規(guī)尊老愛(ài)幼，禮貌待人誠(chéng)實(shí)守信，不斷學(xué)習(xí)按時(shí)作息，杜絕熬夜你對(duì)你家家規(guī)的看法......簡(jiǎn)單闡述你是如何受益的......寫(xiě)作要求:，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使行文流暢、通順；；。文章的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of our Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of you Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow. First, you should respect the old and love the young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next, it’s a good habit to be honest and keep your words. What’s more, you should keep studying , go to bed and get up on time. You mustn’t stay up too late.In my opinion, every family must keep rules and children shouldn’t develop bad habits, like telling lies and be rude to others. We should be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個(gè)溫情的中國(guó)家庭。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語(yǔ)。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。11．（江蘇中考模擬）書(shū)面表達(dá)學(xué)校英語(yǔ)社團(tuán)正在舉辦英語(yǔ)征文比賽，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表所列的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，用英語(yǔ)以“Learn to Smile”為題寫(xiě)一篇短文，參加比賽。生活中會(huì)有不愉快的事，如：……